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Sunshine

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Listening to every heart

0 posted 2011-08-16 05:45 PM

Romance – the old fashioned way

There was something to be said
about the way games
were once played
now we call it internet slang
but a long time ago
it was even better

as a parlor game, Secretaire
with chalk
and paper, and
prettiness wrapped up
in secret knowledge,

where only two minds
merging as one
traveled surreptitious byways
unraveling
secrets of the heart…

and if truly connected
to one another

there was no need
but to find the answer
in each other's eyes...

Imagine…

    Her hair falling gently over her shoulder
    glinting in the candlelight

        I l y
             (I love you)

    He, stooping slightly, breathing in
    her scent, etching

        Y, I k
             (Yes, I know)

    She smiles slightly, pink lips rising
    to the blush upon her cheeks, writing

        I t p a f f u
             (Is there possibly a future for us)

    And he simply wants to pour forth
    his ardent truths, and writes,

        I o b s
             (I often believe so)

Ah, yes, a parlor game of hushed love
no extravagance of loud voices,
flailing arms, or need of anything

other than two hearts
quietly writing

I l y

~*~

© krj 8-16-11
Sparked by Tolstoy, AK
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Margherita
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1 posted 2011-08-16 05:52 PM

I love this tender rendering of once upon a time Romance shorthand, dear Karilea. "Itpaffu" makes me wonder about how long it took him to interprete it

Such a lovely love game!
You set the ambiance and made me share in the magic.

Love,
Margherita

ebonygirl
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since 2011-07-14

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California U.S.A

2 posted 2011-08-16 05:59 PM

Very well done, Sunshine!
You brought romance-R- into the text email age.
Quite clever, and still very romantic.
Ms. E

JerryPat2
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since 2011-02-06

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3 posted 2011-08-16 06:22 PM

I never played the game, but I played the game without the codes, if you understand. It would have been fun though.

~ I knew drugs weren't the answer. I just had to find out for myself. ~

Lori Grosser Rhoden
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4 posted 2011-08-16 06:56 PM

Way cool sweetie! WCS!
Lori

Martie

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5 posted 2011-08-16 09:46 PM

Sissie...You must have made this game up. I never heard of it. (but there was spin the bottle) I guess I came along too early, or too late. Enjoyed this...I'll bet it was fun.

Spiros Zafiris
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6 posted 2011-08-17 07:39 AM

..much enjoyed..quite excellent..

Sunshine

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7 posted 2011-08-18 05:19 PM

Thank you, Poets.

While making my first read of Anna Karenina [finally!] I was ever amused at this game, first for its given name, Secretaire, and it's encryptive nature. The poem came easily.

And if the name of the game can be anglicized in any way, then "secret air" still fits, doesn't it?

They don't imagine games like this much anymore, do they?

"The business of the poet...is to show the sorriness underlying the grandest things and the grandeur underlying the sorriest things." Thomas Hardy

shelerellaSP
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since 2011-08-12

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8 posted 2011-08-19 09:14 AM

Makes me yearn to hop a time-machine to land on "surreptitious byways" and engage in games engaging of so many sentiments...

"where only two minds
merging as one
traveled surreptitious byways
unraveling
secrets of the heart…"

this caught my heart in a way I cannot explain! Thank you for this lovely write!!

suthern

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since 1999-07-29

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9 posted 2011-08-19 03:33 PM

where only two minds
merging as one
traveled surreptitious byways
unraveling
secrets of the heart…

and if truly connected
to one another

there was no need
but to find the answer
in each other's eyes...

I love these lines, Sunshiney One. *S* I would probably have failed at the game... come to think of it, I did!!! LOL

jwesley
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since 2000-04-30

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Spring, Texas

10 posted 2011-08-19 05:01 PM

You did good, my friend...wonderful piece!

j.

Prasad Nataraj
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11 posted 2011-08-20 05:14 AM

Wonderful writing this Sunshine. The ambience and scene created is marvelous!

"The secret behind survival of mankind is kindness and love within our hearts"

JL
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since 2004-04-01

Posts 6128
Texas, USA

12 posted 2011-08-20 05:00 PM

Wow...

That was...
That was...

I think I need a cold shower...

Nice write Ms. sunshine!!

JL

JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16

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Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

13 posted 2011-08-20 10:21 PM

Fine writing on one of my favorite subjects...James

secondhanddreampoet
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14 posted 2011-08-21 07:23 PM

simply superb!

"P.I.P.-land" by the cyber-sea could use much
more pure 'Romanticism' these days, methinks?!

Angel4aKing
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15 posted 2011-08-22 03:38 AM

Completely adorable! One of a kind!!! Loved it!!!

~~~kingsangel~~~

ice
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Pennsylvania

16 posted 2011-08-22 05:27 AM

Very nice, Sunny
I don't think that this kind of romance is out of date, or old fashioned..but I do believe that the skills involved are being lost, and that is a shame for society.
Love the poem.

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