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Word Weaver
Member

since 2011-03-06

Posts 437
California, USA

0 posted 2011-08-09 05:02 PM

Too old am I for unrequited
heart-felt promises not kept
as piercing as red-hot daggers
scaring over scars
letters strewn about
the back porch
a resemblance to
falling leaves of autumn
the air oppressive
with late summer heat
a smothering blanket
forcing me against my will
to keep on breathing
demanding breath after breath
Billie Holiday coming through
the speakers sings my song
eyes scanning unwilling
the letters page after page
they tell the story of
years of hope crushed
trust extinguished like a
burned down candle’s flame
dying a slow death
agonizing over what
might have been
the truth comes like
a cool refreshing wind
followed by acceptance
love is for the young
let them have it
I need it no more
far too jaded am I

©Marcia Miller-Twiford www.thewritingforum.net

Lori Grosser Rhoden
Member Patricius

since 2009-10-10

Posts 10202
Fair to middlin' of nowhere

1 posted 2011-08-09 05:33 PM

Beautifully written...but I believe one is never too old to love...just too scared. Ironicaly your ending is my favorite part.
Lori

Michael

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Member Rara Avis

since 1999-08-13

Posts 7666
California

2 posted 2011-08-09 06:13 PM

quote:
love is for the young
let them have it

We're all young at heart, some would say. But then, I personally appeal to your side far more than theirs. I truly empathize with you on this one, Marcia.

Very good write.

JerryPat2
Member Laureate

since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

3 posted 2011-08-09 07:00 PM

Being jaded can be fun. There comes a time when lies can be thrown out with the one doing the lying, with no backward look.

~ If work is so terrific, why do they have to pay you to do it. ~

JL
Member Ascendant

since 2004-04-01

Posts 6128
Texas, USA

4 posted 2011-08-09 11:43 PM

"the truth comes like
a cool refreshing wind"

Grab onto the wind and do not let it go.

I Really enjoy your writings.

JL

Prasad Nataraj
Senior Member

since 2008-05-29

Posts 1149
Bangalore,India

5 posted 2011-08-10 07:18 AM

"eyes scanning unwilling
the letters page after page
they tell the story of
years of hope crushed
trust extinguished like a
burned down candle’s flame" such powerful lines. fine writing.

"The secret behind survival of mankind is kindness and love within our hearts"

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

6 posted 2011-08-10 08:59 AM

Hmmm...Lori said what I was going to say...

great minds and all that.

Sending

suthern

Member Seraphic

since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

7 posted 2011-08-10 02:49 PM

I understand all too well. But if, by chance, lack of need somehow coaxes a love into being that's not unrequited and isn't just a lot of pain wrapped in a thin veneer of joy... well... old as I am, I won't kick it to the curb. LOL

I really like this!

ebonygirl
Member Elite

since 2011-07-14

Posts 2000
California U.S.A

8 posted 2011-08-10 05:39 PM

Beautiful Word Weaver,
We all need to love and be loved and somehow it finds us when we least expect it.
"Amethyst- Love, Joy, Fun coming our way"
Ms. E

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