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Your Touch
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Your Touch |
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Namyh Senior Member
since 2009-01-20
Posts 988 |
Your Touch You touch and I’m left dangling on a string with heart expanding and I do believe no angling will relieve me of its load for now I’m captured, snared and raptured by sensations manufactured on a countdown to a fracture bursting to explode. Out blast the tingling impacts riding nerves to every synapse telling knees and legs they might collapse upon this flattened floor. I’m drenched in breathless breathing that now blinds my heart perceiving why my lungs and mouth are grieving since there’s oxygen no more ‘cause your aroma sends me reeling with hypnotic smell careening into muscle, flesh and bone at rates which can’t be charted and I would spend forever basking in your breath with everlasting hope you’d never end my gasping only just now started. Then from that magic moment transfixed, I will find your image did fix in my mind when Time does insist I have reached my end. I’ll walk Eternity without the stumbling on legs and feet made whole from crumbling ‘cause thoughts of you will brace my tumbling down that breakless bend. Namyh [This message has been edited by Namyh (08-03-2011 11:04 PM).] |
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tuffluv66 Member
since 2011-05-13
Posts 121Iowa, U.S.A. |
its amazing how a lifetime can fit in a moment |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I’m drenched in breathless breathing that now blinds my heart perceiving why my lungs and mouth are grieving since there’s oxygen no more That's a powerful touch! *S* I love these lines! *S* |
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Namyh Senior Member
since 2009-01-20
Posts 988 |
tuffluv – A lifetime can indeed often fit in a moment but an equivalent poser is how a moment can often make a whole lifetime. Thanks tuffluv for your enjoyment and for stopping by with your insight. Namyh |
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ebonygirl Member Elite
since 2011-07-14
Posts 2000California U.S.A |
Enjoyed reading your poem, Namyh. ebonygirl |
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Namyh Senior Member
since 2009-01-20
Posts 988 |
*S* - When the heart races, the blood surges, the nostrils flare and the oxygen level depletes rapidly, There’s a good chance you’ve been “touched”. And here’s the kicker. Its impact on the physiology of the human body is exponentially heightened when it’s……..accidental and least expected! Whoa! I better stop now ‘cause my pulse is starting to quicken. LOL. So very glad you love those lines. Thanks suthern for putting a big “S” in my day with your enjoyment. Namyh |
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Namyh Senior Member
since 2009-01-20
Posts 988 |
ebonygirl – What poet could ask for more than for a written work to be enjoyed by a fellow poet. That ‘touches’ me as I hope this ‘touched’ you. Thanks for stopping in ebonygirl. Namyh |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Loved the opening stanza in particular, and the opening line was perfect!, my friend, and definitely enjoyed everything that followed... j. [This message has been edited by jwesley (08-07-2011 01:40 PM).] |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Nice...James |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Touch, the singularly most common yet uncommon sensory requirement needed to feel. Enjoyed, Namyh. Thank you! |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
I like how different this poem is from your recent postings, and I like to think of the "touch". Thank you. A |
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Prasad Nataraj Senior Member
since 2008-05-29
Posts 1149Bangalore,India |
"cause your aroma sends me reeling with hypnotic smell careening into muscle, flesh and bone at rates which can’t be charted and I would spend forever basking in your breath with everlasting hope you’d never end my gasping only just now started" fine lines, that's how i feel while having my morning lemon tea and watching the eucalyptus trees from my balcony.  "The secret behind survival of mankind is kindness and love within our hearts" |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
A touch that sings in every vibrant line you offer us here, dear Namyh. A big smile lingers here after this exciting and enthralling read. Love, Margherita |
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