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Open Poetry #47

What do you have to tell me

kudanesh
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since 2007-12-01

Posts 135
Peterborough,England

0 posted 2011-08-02 09:30 PM

There is nothing in this world
That can make me change my mind
My heart has made its decision
While my head follows behind

There is no chance of me losing faith
In the person I have chosen to love
No man or woman come between us
Or answer to the powers above

There is pain in the voice of my loved one
A pain I cannot ignore
Pain that I would like to douse
To bring to me the one I adore

So in the face of what may confront me
I solemnly swear this vow
To hold my loved one closely
And help them any way that I know how

tuffluv66
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since 2011-05-13

Posts 121
Iowa, U.S.A.

1 posted 2011-08-02 11:43 PM

good flow

Lori Grosser Rhoden
Member Patricius

since 2009-10-10

Posts 10202
Fair to middlin' of nowhere

2 posted 2011-08-03 01:05 AM

much wisdom in your words...
Lori

Michael

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Member Rara Avis

since 1999-08-13

Posts 7666
California

3 posted 2011-08-03 11:51 AM

Your words hold sincerity not matched by many. I wish you strength and luck on your endeavor.

Michael

Falling rain

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since 2008-01-31

Posts 2178
Small town, Illinois

4 posted 2011-08-03 05:45 PM

The writing is well done, but love poems aren't my favorite to read. Just to cheesy for my taste. You did a good job though with the flow and rhythm.

ebonygirl
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since 2011-07-14

Posts 2000
California U.S.A

5 posted 2011-08-03 07:47 PM

So caring to the one you love.
Enjoyed,
ebonygirl

kudanesh
Member

since 2007-12-01

Posts 135
Peterborough,England

6 posted 2011-08-04 06:11 PM

Thank you all for the comments and kind words.

I'm not a huge fan of love poems but my inspiration is a person that I do love.

but each to there own.

Prasad Nataraj
Senior Member

since 2008-05-29

Posts 1149
Bangalore,India

7 posted 2011-08-05 12:01 PM

Fine writing.

"The secret behind survival of mankind is kindness and love within our hearts"

suthern

Member Seraphic

since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

8 posted 2011-08-07 09:07 PM

What a beautiful promise!!

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