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Angel4aKing
Senior Member

since 2006-09-27

Posts 1372
USA

0 posted 2011-07-30 04:03 AM

unfolding memories
that she never shares
rewriting them to her liking
then asking "who cares"

choosing the ending
again and again
trying not to remember
how it really was then

forming a creedance
with a bottle of booze
still forging a battle
with a little to lose

now with sorrows that
she's stored tidily away
she picks up anohter
glass of chardonay

tomorrow will
take care of its self
as the dust continues
to collect on the box
on the shelf

~~~kingsangel~~~

Michael

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Member Rara Avis

since 1999-08-13

Posts 7666
California

1 posted 2011-07-30 02:24 PM

I have one of those boxes. In fact, I once wrote about mine too. I might just repost it after reading this.

"trying not to remember
how it really was then"

Something "then" was real enough to save the trinket. One must determine whether they are longing for something they savored, or are savoring something they longed for.

Good write.

Michael

JerryPat2
Member Laureate

since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

2 posted 2011-07-30 02:44 PM

Nice work on a despairing subject.Seems everyone has a despairing subject today, myself included.

That chardonnay doesn't help, but it does blunt the pain, so I suppose you could say that it helps.

~ Forget the health food. I need all the preservatives I can get. ~

ebonygirl
Member Elite

since 2011-07-14

Posts 2000
California U.S.A

3 posted 2011-07-30 05:27 PM

Dear Angel4aKing,
Heartfelt words in your poem.
Loved it!
ebonygirl

Angel4aKing
Senior Member

since 2006-09-27

Posts 1372
USA

4 posted 2011-07-30 06:38 PM

Thanks to all of you....it is nice to hear what my poetry might mean to others .... since words can mean different things to different people....

~~~kingsangel~~~

[This message has been edited by Angel4aKing (07-30-2011 07:59 PM).]

suthern

Member Seraphic

since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

5 posted 2011-08-04 09:51 PM

I've done some of those rewrites... and have a box. *S* I guess I always will... they're part of me whether on a shelf or in the trash... and some parts can't be drowned. *S* Powerful and poignant write!

tuffluv66
Member

since 2011-05-13

Posts 121
Iowa, U.S.A.

6 posted 2011-08-04 10:20 PM

A very nice write

Dark Stranger
Member Patricius

since 2001-03-19

Posts 13631
West Coast

7 posted 2011-08-05 11:22 AM

angelbaby..if you ride fast enough...the dust never settles or collects...and the highway ain't half bad for moving the face around into a smile...enjoyed it ms

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

8 posted 2011-08-07 12:40 PM

I like this...James

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