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Professor Gloom
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since 2000-07-23

Posts 3082
of Depression

0 posted 2011-07-27 02:36 PM

Breath or Death,
Too late she wakes to living,
To too much pain, to too little gain,
And to none for the giving.

Just to breath the air,
To attempt again after coughing pain,
Did she dare too much air
So shallow sips and attempts to sit
Slowly,
So slowly the room stops spinning,
Another day is now beginning.

Pills stave off Death,
So is said and so she’s read
And beside her bed are plenty,
White ones, yellow ones, and red,
Grab a hand full and wash them down
Pills taken she’s not dead
And bare feet touch the cold ground.

Clothlessly she moves,
Closets of cloth dreams weak at the seams,
She grabs a robe alone
She wanders off
In fine skin over old bone
With a cough.

Gloom

ebonygirl
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since 2011-07-14

Posts 2000
California U.S.A

1 posted 2011-07-27 02:45 PM

I could clearly envision her dilemma.
Well done,
ebonygirl

Marchmadness
Member Rara Avis

since 2007-09-16

Posts 9271
So. El Monte, California

2 posted 2011-07-29 04:05 AM

I hardly know what to say here, Professor. So sad.
Ida

ice
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since 2003-05-17

Posts 3404
Pennsylvania

3 posted 2011-07-29 06:01 AM

Words arranged like these are the reason I love to read poetry.

Professor Gloom
Member Elite

since 2000-07-23

Posts 3082
of Depression

4 posted 2011-07-29 09:21 PM

Thank you ebonygirl,
Not so sure it’s a dilemma
As often the case the choice is forced upon her
She just adapts
Best she can

Thank you Marchmadness,
For taking the time to read and respond.

Thank you Ice,
Pleased I could add to your enjoyment of poetry
Through my humble words.

Gloom

miscellanea
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since 2004-06-24

Posts 4060
OH

5 posted 2011-08-03 12:34 PM

Hello, Professor. I enjoyed your excellently written poem, although it doesn't paint a pretty picture. Especially liked the handling of your word choice and how you put them together in your last verse. Hope you are well.

miscellanea

suthern

Member Seraphic

since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

6 posted 2011-08-05 02:44 PM

You wrote a harsh situation with such tenderness... this one aches.

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