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Open Poetry #47

comfortable discomfort

Dark Stranger
Member Patricius

since 2001-03-19

Posts 13631
West Coast

0 posted 2011-07-15 09:53 AM

yes it was vanilla bean again today
and I think you saw it in my eyes
when I passed a glance your way
but kept it in the plastic bag
so none would spill where not wanted

you were proper as always in your poise
like a key to some hidden treasure
clutched safely and deeply within a sigh
your lady like seemed a bit uncomfortable
with your why not on, like smile lipstick

as if you knew my pen would be here now
writing words in this movable sand
where tides would come and erase my mind
just to keep us as strangers within our glances
like windows facing the morning of each other

with some sun between keeping our eyes closed

__________

daark

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

1 posted 2011-07-15 04:28 PM

There's something about vanilla,
and keys, and warm sun that is
just so captivating. You wrote
a

...at least, for me.

Thanks, cool dude.

Dark Stranger
Member Patricius

since 2001-03-19

Posts 13631
West Coast

2 posted 2011-07-15 04:36 PM

ms sun...thank you pretty one...for warming my day

Margherita
Member Seraphic

since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

3 posted 2011-07-15 06:43 PM

quote:
like a key to some hidden treasure
clutched safely and deeply within a sigh

... and a sigh you stir with this stunning composition.

Soooo captivating.

Love,
Margherita

Alison

Member Rara Avis

since 2008-01-27

Posts 9318
Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy!

4 posted 2011-07-16 01:47 AM

You know, sometimes you just write beautiful. The story keeps me reading and your word use .. is enviable.

Ali-san

Dark Stranger
Member Patricius

since 2001-03-19

Posts 13631
West Coast

5 posted 2011-07-16 04:54 AM

ms mar, thank you lady friend for your eyes

______________

ms ali-san, thank you little one

Roniece Dawson-Bruce
Member Ascendant

since 2000-01-29

Posts 5689
Sydney, Australia

6 posted 2011-07-17 08:49 AM

some kind of wonderful I would say!

Be kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight.........

Dark Stranger
Member Patricius

since 2001-03-19

Posts 13631
West Coast

7 posted 2011-07-18 06:55 AM

thanks ms r&b

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