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JerryPat2
Member Laureate

since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

0 posted 2011-09-30 02:19 PM

I always wanted you fresh from a bath,
There was just something about you,
still warm from the bath,
smelling so . . . you!
You were sweet,
gave me that wonderful smile
that meant everything.

At night we'd lie in bed,
talk, whisper really,
about nothing,
just hearing each others voice.
Sometimes that was enough.
Not often, but sometimes.
We were a randy twosome,
liked to take chances
in public.
Silly, and we knew it, but still . . .

Los Angeles during the late sixties,
marched to the beat
of our own hormones.
Whiskey A-Go-Go on the strip,
catching the headliners
before they were headliners.
Jose Feliciano,
he made fun of his blindness.
just taking in the whole Hollywood scene
turned us on,
like we needed anything to turn us on.
I fooled around with speed,
other things.
You told me you were high enough on life,
didn't need that phoniness.

You were too.
High on life.
We were good together.
When we were together.
When we weren't together,
I'd come back to you,
or I'd send for you,
wherever I was at that particular time.
you always came to me.
Like the wayward wind,
I always left again.
then came the day,
it was you who did the leaving.
I never saw you again.

~~ Those who are silent are the first to be shot. ~~

luminosity
Senior Member

since 2005-11-18

Posts 813

1 posted 2011-09-30 02:27 PM

hmmm.....wonderful write......takes one deep into your memory, but at the same time to one's own love long gone.......
sighs and remembers...

Lori Grosser Rhoden
Member Patricius

since 2009-10-10

Posts 10202
Fair to middlin' of nowhere

2 posted 2011-09-30 02:28 PM

That is so bittersweet Jerry, I was dreading the ending...had a feeling it wouldn't be happy even though the first was almost idyllic. Beautiful write

JerryPat2
Member Laureate

since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

3 posted 2011-09-30 02:32 PM

Appreciate your correct comments, luminosity, it was a love I never got over.

Lori, thank you so much for your perception. And yes, in the beginning it was idyllic. In the end it was tragic.

~~ Those who are silent are the first to be shot. ~~

Michael

Moderator

Member Rara Avis

since 1999-08-13

Posts 7666
California

4 posted 2011-09-30 04:28 PM

You certainly know how to cherish the good. Very nostalgic... even with the sad ending. Well done.

Michael

JerryPat2
Member Laureate

since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

5 posted 2011-09-30 04:46 PM

Michael, our memories, even the bad is sometimes all we have. Thank you.

~~ Those who are silent are the first to be shot. ~~

JL
Member Ascendant

since 2004-04-01

Posts 6128
Texas, USA

6 posted 2011-09-30 05:38 PM

"then came the day,
it was you who did the leaving.
I never saw you again."

Very sad. Nice write.

JL

Love the Lord your God with all your heart, and with all your soul,and with all your mind. Love your neighbor as yourself.
Maranatha!

JerryPat2
Member Laureate

since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

7 posted 2011-09-30 06:13 PM

Thank you very much, JL.

~~ Those who are silent are the first to be shot. ~~

icebox
Member Elite

since 2003-05-03

Posts 4383
in the shadows

8 posted 2011-09-30 09:56 PM

LA in the 60's, what a great hunting ground!

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

9 posted 2011-09-30 10:11 PM

My friend, even though I'm but a few years
or less younger, I'm pretty sure that my
feet stood on the shadow of yours at one
time or another, especially in LA.

It is nice to/for me to know
that we might have strolled a street
somewhere in time.

JerryPat2
Member Laureate

since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

10 posted 2011-09-30 10:13 PM

Hah! Ain't dat da truff, Ice.

Hello Sunshine. Yep, it is not only possible, but most likely that, even if we didn't actually cross paths, our shadows did. Thank for stopping by.

~~ Those who are silent are the first to be shot. ~~

suthern

Member Seraphic

since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

11 posted 2011-10-01 11:45 AM

Beautiful mix of both the sweet and the bitter. We often forget to savor the first until the latter lingers on our tongue. You write both vividly.

JerryPat2
Member Laureate

since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

12 posted 2011-10-01 11:50 AM

You have it figured out, suthern, the bitter reveals the sweet, and they are both intertwined. Thank you for being here.

~~ Those who are silent are the first to be shot. ~~

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