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Open Poetry #47

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Amberzlynnc
Member

since 2010-08-24

Posts 229
New Jersey

0 posted 2011-06-24 02:59 AM

Sing me a tune that will put me to sleep,
a song that’s as soft as it’s sweet
In through my ears to my soul, it will seep;
the first step to a dream world, complete.
As my lids shut and my breaths become deep,
relaxed from my head to my feet
I’ll rejoice knowing that I no longer count sheep
as your melody’s sung on repeat

*Amber

soul drifter
Senior Member

since 2004-09-08

Posts 711
Colorado

1 posted 2011-06-24 12:19 PM

Lovely, a short but sweeter than candy song to hum to myself to brighten any mood. Man...I'm gonna hafta find more of your work! Wonderful!

Graffiti Poet
Junior Member

since 2011-06-21

Posts 11

2 posted 2011-06-24 04:56 PM

Superb rhyming, excellent poem. Stephen

JerryPat2
Member Laureate

since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

3 posted 2011-06-30 09:06 PM

Nicely done with the rhyme scheme the same, sometimes it is hard to keep the lines coherent. Not in this case though.

~ Man who wants pretty nurse, must be patient. ~

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