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The break-out
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The break-out |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa 
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I let it be, indeed I did, that break-out from beneath the skin and let it view the world at large from the safety of my eyes. It stayed a while to look at you and see how nature sparkled so when viewed by one entwined with the tendrils of delight. But it leaked, you know, like break-outs do on the brims and down the cheeks because I think it knew right then days of safety count down, down. And so they did and so it slid down channels of pure agony into a pool of lethargy to float again as one dismissed. I feel it sometimes, yes, I do, build muscle to escape the pool and it thrashes like the wild untamed down there beneath the skin. But no, no, no; there's no way up when agony has smoothed the walls that once held the solid handholds of the need to be and see. And so it floats to death's dark gate a break-out that not ere again can climb unbidden from within to the safety of my eyes! Helen / 4 January 2011 [This message has been edited by Honeybunch (01-04-2011 07:45 AM).] |
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JerryPat Senior Member
since 2010-10-30
Posts 1991Louisiana/America |
It seems, Helen, that we both are on the same nostalgic wavelength this morning. I am well aware of the pain and suffering we cause one another when "love" begins to disintegrate. Words are hurled, which can never be forgiven even though we say we forgive. I enjoyed this, as I do all of your searching poetry. When early morning quietness seeps into my being it's like I'm being hugged by everything good in the world.�August 16, 2010 |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
Thanks, Jerry. I sure was being nostalgic but not totally as you describe. No harsh words, etc. etc. but just the knowing of something so beautiful that never lived up to its truth. Can't actually describe it better than that without being straightforward - and I am, of course, a story teller.  |
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JerryPat Senior Member
since 2010-10-30
Posts 1991Louisiana/America |
Sorry, Helen. Just seemed that way to me. I've been sick for four days, maybe that clouded my perception. When early morning quietness seeps into my being |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
This goes straight to my heart and grabs it in a choke hold. Saddness is not an easy emotion... But you sure do write it well, honey girl~ |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
Very sad, but so well written, Helen. Ida |
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s1nfully_1nn0c3nt Senior Member
since 2003-10-26
Posts 1105Watertown, NY |
While i read this, it seemed to describe tears of sadness....one could describe tears as a break out I suppose....something that you try to conceal...to eh, "fight"... Enjoyed.-Trina. |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
Thanks everyone. Was just the "soul" or "the spirit of one" breaking out from beneath the flesh and viewing and crying from out my eyes. |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Helen You have this amazing ability to step out from behind your gaurd through a poem and face the reality of your thoughts. However, I have read/seen the warm side of you and know there's a deeply sensitive person there that loves dearly. This has such wonderful metaphors and it opens the reader's perception of hopelesness to another realm. As you spin these off I realize you have a great love for poetic expression. Eric ain't doin nothin at all just answerin the call |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
Thank you, dear Eric. Yes, I guess I do "spin them off", don't I, but one has got to be quick, you know, before the moment passes and remains forever unacknowledged. They are my moments (although sometimes I'm not sure about that) and I do love weaving them into a story perhaps just to make them real in an unreal world - would take too long to explain that statement. I do have many sad moments (wow, an admission from me - see what you've done - but, although of a serious disposition, I'm not a ... misery. I love, yes. I'm guarded, yes, because sometimes my sensitivity (yes, I'm sensitive) picks up what others are really feeling and that makes interaction difficult. It's hard sometimes to be free and easy when bombarded by the ... unseen. It's not like I can switch it off either - it just happens. I didn't need to say all this, did I? Just felt I needed to - HA! - to make myself real. For all that life is great! Helen |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Helen....It is good for the spirit to break out of the confines of the human heart and speak the truth. I think that is what you do many times in your poetry and that's a good thing. And this... "one has got to be quick, you know, before the moment passes and remains forever unacknowledged." So true! |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I am glad that you release... it helps me!  |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
When I first read this, I thought that I was tuned in to what you were saying, but then I began to get eager to dismiss my interpretations...this is such a lovely, touching write...then I read your replies to others and I took comfort in that initial understanding...thank you for sharing this...it is exquisite...oh, and my favorite stanza is this one: "And so they did and so it slid down channels of pure agony into a pool of lethargy to float again as one dismissed." |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
Martie, Sunshine & steavenr - Thank you so much. It's so nice when my stories are understood and equally so when they help others. Different countries, different lifestyles but at the core we are so similar. Getting to the core is the difficult part though for a lot of us. |
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