An Ancient Sorrow (Sonnet)

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Open Poetry #47

An Ancient Sorrow (Sonnet)

CastleGuard
Senior Member

since 2003-04-30

Posts 760
Alberta, Canada

0 posted 2011-05-30 02:56 AM

An ancient sorrow haunts his troubled heart,
And at night, as the corridors draw dark,
Then freely do the vagrant shadows dart
From the rule of will to a blackened mark.
And he thinks back to youth and unwise days,
To all the crimes of selfish thoughts and deeds --
And his rueful heart repents, parting ways
From smile and mirth, and crimson regret bleeds.
But within he weeps, he holds back the tears
From drawing downward course upon his frame;
He acts the part, shows not the inner fears,
In vain he clings onto his fragile claim:
For then the Will - the traitor - yields to pain
And uncontrolled the savage tears do stain.

CG

Margherita
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since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

1 posted 2011-05-30 06:05 AM

Poetic excellence and powerful psychologic message, dear CastleGuard.

Love,
Margherita

JerryPat2
Member Laureate

since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

2 posted 2011-05-30 11:10 AM

Yes. The pooem was correct in every way as far as I can see. The rhyming was great and the cadence of the lines blended perfectly with the preceding and next. Beautifully done.

~ Diplomacy is the art of saying 'Nice doggie' until you can find a rock ~

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