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The Widower - Villanelle
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The Widower - Villanelle |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana 
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The widower sucked a sob from his throat, Gritting his teeth trying not to give in, Dressed all in black except for his blue coat. Inside his hand he squeezed tightly the note, He felt a drop of rain upon his skin, The widower sucked a sob from his throat. The casket hovered o'er the empty moat, His mouth quivered thinking of his wife, Gwen, Dressed all in black except for his blue coat. Preacher droned on as if casting for votes, The old man knew the pastor drank sloe gin, The widower sucked a sob from his throat. Their only child, Jack, baaa'd like a young goat, The old man was glad he hadn't been twins, Dressed all in black except for his blue coat. The coffin was lowered like a sunk boat, Note he dropped in said, Jack is not my kin. The widower sucked a sob from his throat, Dressed all in black except for his blue coat. ~ Plastic surgeons are always making mountains out of molehills. ~ |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Excellent work, dear Jerry. Those last moments of good bye ceremonies always make people consider some secrets that maybe have lasted for as long as the relationship lasted. Very profound and though the theme is sad, the poem is very thought provoking and enriching as it stirs our sensitivity. Love, Margherita |
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keenshot Junior Member
since 2011-05-20
Posts 10 |
i am just new here... what a sad poem.... but it is certainly a good one. |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Margherita, I know it is sad. I write a lot of sad poetry. Life isn't always sun, roses and happy smiling faces. Thank you for you comments. keenshot, I didn't think I had seen that moniker before. Thank you for taking the time to read and comment. ~ Plastic surgeons are always making mountains out of molehills. ~ |
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EmmaRose Senior Member
since 2011-03-02
Posts 1376Midwest |
O those secrets from cradle to grave. Some come to light, some stay within. This was a good one. |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Thank you, EmmaRose, I appreciate your comments. ~ 24 hours in a day ... 24 beers in a case .... Coincidence? ~ |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
The villanelle is one of my favorites, so you caught my eye. Your poem was very fitting, considering that I just moments ago completed updating our Remember page to include our most recent PipTalk loss. Very nicely done, Jerry - I love reading poets who enjoy poetic structure..  |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Thank you very much, Nan. I am a wanderer among the poetical styles. I started with rhyme, and still love it, then there were certain things I needed to get out there where the free style was the best instrument to do that. But I like and dabble in different styles, and by no means do I feel qualified to call myself a poet, not really, I'm just a guy who likes to write poems. Thank you again for making my day. P.S.: I'll check out the "Remember" page. ~ 24 hours in a day ... 24 beers in a case .... Coincidence? ~ |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Very well done Jerry You capture the scene so vividly. Eric true love never looks after it's own interests |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Thanks Eric, and good morning to ya. ~ 24 hours in a day ... 24 beers in a case .... Coincidence? ~ |
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