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Looking Back |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa 
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LOOKING BACK 8 May 2011 As the dream train swept her away she stood on tiptoes leaning out the window looking back - and their eyes locked almost strongly enough to stop the train. Owl |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
And your words bring such intense emotion for their beauty ... almost enough to stop my breath! Fantastic vision, dear Owl. To keep in mind: souls travel faster than trains  Love, Margherita |
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ice Member Elite
since 2003-05-17
Posts 3404Pennsylvania |
Four twenty eight, a.m.: And I cannot sleep...being Driven towards the coming day; Rising to this, these Mere several words, on a screen-- This show of intensity, of two lives. The real reason for human life Which is strong passion-- Strong enough to stop a train And I am oddly relaxed, My tension leaves As I visualize the lovers Saying good bye. नमस्ते, ford [This message has been edited by ice (05-13-2011 07:38 AM).] |
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EmmaRose Senior Member
since 2011-03-02
Posts 1376Midwest |
The brakes of the heart have been known to stop trains, planes, automobiles in a flash, all may suddenly change direction. I enjoyed this much Dear Owl. |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Thank you, Margherita, for your lovely words. Yes, you are so right. Souls travel faster than trains, lol. Thank you, Ford. I am glad my poem helped you to relax. Smiles. And I enjoyed your reply, EmmaRose. Thank you. Owl |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Now THAT'S a look back. ~ I think the freezer deserves a light as well. ~ |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Yep, Jerry. I s'pose it is. Smiles. Owl |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
Fascinating write, Diana. Love it. Ida |
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AlCowie Member
since 2011-05-13
Posts 92London, UK |
Strong image, enjoyed! |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Thank you, Ida. I am glad you did. Thank you, Al. Glad you enjoyed it. Owl |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
I can imagine a lady looking forward to looking back glancing over her shoulder at herself and smiling |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Smiles, Dark. Owl |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
diana, this is a marvellous inspiration, your images penetrated my mind with strenght and the dream became real.the read has the power of a magical truth. very well done, yann |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Thank you for your beautiful reply, Yann. Owl |
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Klassy Lassy Member Elite
since 2005-06-28
Posts 2187Oregon |
Oh, such bells and whistles area going off in my head, Diana. I love this one and find myself smiling at the thought of destinies re-drawn by the heart. De-railing here!!! LOL ~Karen |
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Alison 
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
Sometimes I just want to pull the danged cord and stop the danged dream! A |
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Capricious Member
since 2002-09-14
Posts 89California, USA |
To my mind, this could be read in two ways. Either the dreamer longs for the destination, or fears it. Either she asserts her will to stay on the train, or wishes she could get off, but can't. There is also the mystery of what the second party, the conscious mind, is thinking ... Dreams can be a two-edged sword. I wonder if the butterfly dreaming he was a man ever considered it a nightmare? |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Thank you, Karen. Smiling at how much you enjoyed the poem. Thank you, Alison. Smiles. Thank you, Capricious. There are other ways to read it too. Owl |
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