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2islander2
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by the sea

0 posted 2011-05-08 11:35 PM

One day there were concentration camps,
Barbed wires to separate men,
Lies to kill life,
Shadows cast by strangers,

Some are only happy
by preventing others from being happy,
by building dams
In the middle of cities depending on faces

Then one day we really say to ourselves
I forgot to look at my garden,
I forgot to drink a fruit juice,
I forgot to phone to a close friend,
What’s the use of those who don’t love.

Un jour il y eu des camps de concentration,
des barbelés pour séparer les hommes,
des mensonges pour assassiner la vie,
des ombres jetées par des inconnus,

certains ne sont heureux
qu’en empêchant les autres d’être heureux,
qu’en construisant des barrages
au milieu des villes au dépend des visages

puis un jour on se dit pour de vrai
j’ai oublié de regarder mon jardin,
j’ai oublié de boire un jus de fruits,
j'ai oublié de téléphoner à une amie,
A quoi bon ceux qui restent sans aimer .

[This message has been edited by 2islander2 (05-10-2011 04:37 PM).]

Margherita
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since 2003-02-08

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Eternity

1 posted 2011-05-09 05:24 AM

à quoi bon ceux qui restent sans aimer

Those who are not able to love are here to learn and if they would read you, they might reconsider.

This is such a wise and very thought provoking poem, dear Yann.

Love and peace.
Margherita

"Love is the One who masters all things;
I am mastered totally by Love."
(Rumi)

2islander2
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since 2008-03-12

Posts 6825
by the sea

2 posted 2011-05-09 06:21 AM

merci margherita, je t'adore pour le commentaire superbe et les conseils que tu m'as apportés,

bonne journée à toi,

yann

JerryPat2
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since 2011-02-06

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South Louisiana

3 posted 2011-05-09 08:53 AM

Those who put barbed wire around its populace kill them as if they had plunged a dagger into their heart. Sometimes that barbed wire can just be rules and overbearing regulations. We are beginning to get that here in America.

~ I have never been in a situation where having money made it worse. ~

faithmairee
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since 2011-01-05

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Poe Haven, USA

4 posted 2011-05-09 05:53 PM

very thought-provoking and sensitively written.,,so full of truth...thank you for this great write, friend

There must be a poem in here somewhere.

secondhanddreampoet
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5 posted 2011-05-09 09:34 PM

v. well said!

"What’s the use of those who don’t love(?!)"

I would add to that:

Nemo vir est qui mundum non reddat meliorem:

What man is truly a man who does not make the world better?!

2islander2
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6 posted 2011-05-10 03:43 AM

Hello Jerry, I perfectly share your comment about barbed war and some kinds of great exclusion, both physical and moral, this is very metaphorical, have a nice day

yann

2islander2
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7 posted 2011-05-10 03:43 AM

mairee this is so kind and generous, appreciate it.

yann

2islander2
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8 posted 2011-05-10 03:45 AM

thanks Bruce for the deep of thinking and presence here. love your writes and reads, so accurate,

yann

OwlSA
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9 posted 2011-05-10 04:11 PM

Philosophique et tellement vrai. J'aime ce poème magique, peint au ciel avec la brosse d’un peintre des yeux qui voient tout, et écrit avec la plume d'un vrai poète et qui pense prondément. Il me semble que la musique délicieuse t'a fait penser ces pensées très intéressantes.

Owl

2islander2
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by the sea

10 posted 2011-05-10 04:33 PM

merci beaucoup diana pour ce très gentil commentaire, c'est émouvant, je ne sais pas si le poème est fini, je vais peut être rajouter un vers dans la dernière strophe, quelque chose sur l'amitié,

PS : bravo pour ton français parfait et émouvant lui aussi car tu écris très bien, c'est je le sens littéraire,

amitiés

yann

OwlSA
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11 posted 2011-05-11 03:38 PM

Merci beaucoup, Yann. J’adore entendre tes mots si gentils au sujet de mon français. J’ai vu le vers que tu as ajouté, et il améliore le poème encore plus.

Owl

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