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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast 
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on those perhaps colored mornings when you leave the veils behind and give my eyes room to wrap around the sighs of your woman skin slowly like threads around the finger ends to make memory kinds of sounds those unforgettable knots tied down lest they slip off from your willing and become just strings attached to limbs which you say are helpless to manage the directions they really need to go versus where they are wanting to go deeper and then those verses are our poems again _____________ daark |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Okay. I liked the hell out of this one. Your amazing talent with wordplay never fails to impress me. I may not always comment, because sometimes, quite frankly, I don't understand enough of it to give an opinion. I think I got the thread of this one. Love. Love these two lines in particular . . . Says much . . . "those unforgettable knots tied down lest they slip off from your willing" ~ I went to a restaurant that serves "breakfast at any time" / I ordered French Toast during the Renaissance. ~ |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
thank you JP... |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Scintillating, Dark. Owl |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
lady Owl thank you for looking in |
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Alison 
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
Well, maybe it's this one I'll take with me. Oh hell, I'll take both. Thank you, dear friend of mine. Ali-san |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
lil ali-san, thanks babe |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
loved your clever twists on the use of the parts of speech in novel ways...a pleasure to read...nice |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
I think this is hauntingly beautiful, dear D. Love, Margherita |
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ice Member Elite
since 2003-05-17
Posts 3404Pennsylvania |
Excellent poetry--Topic,and form..thank you |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
steavenr, thanks amigo _______________ ms mar, thanks lady friend _________________ ice, thank you much |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
/main/forumdisplay.cgi?action=displayarchive&number=91&topic=001696 . A little blast from the past... You knew I would enjoy this one...  . |
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