Open Poetry #47 |
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SilentShadow Junior Member
since 2006-04-20
Posts 32Fl. U.S.A. |
night be swift, when sleep's uncertain, save my shattered soul from hurting, a tear is shed, that lifts the curtain, that hides the truth of loves true burden... |
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Kaoru
since 2003-06-07
Posts 3892where the wild flowers grow |
So what's the truth of love's true burden? What's behind the curtain? Tell me! I must know! Or is it that love is a burden in and of itself? I don't know.. pondering now.. Thanks, by the way, for making me ponder. Enjoyed. |
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SilentShadow Junior Member
since 2006-04-20
Posts 32Fl. U.S.A. |
sometimes love itself is a burden, especially when you love someone who's love for you may only be a manifestation of a fantasy for them, and may never come to fruition..., funny, I didn't realize that this was the anniversary of my first post... |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Beautifully composed. You got your point across. ~ Don't insult the alligator till after you cross the river. ~ |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
So sad but so very well expressed. The night can be a very lonely place. |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
"a tear is shed, that lifts the curtain, that hides the truth of loves true burden" ...cool phrase in an excellent write...reads aloud very well...nice job |
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Southernfury New Member Posts 5 |
so Beautiful, but so heartbreakingly sad because i know your pain |
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