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Open Poetry #47

brim of the maybe tree

Dark Stranger
Member Patricius

since 2001-03-19

Posts 13631
West Coast

0 posted 2011-04-20 11:17 AM

spring has never been too ladylike there
where she lets the mountains drizzle down
between where she was hanging leaves around
from her tip toe dawn and nothing else on

and then that girl gurgle laughter too
wet always sounds almost too vulgar
just to be innocently sensual on purpose
with out other intentions slowly thawing

her scent is spattered on where ever breezes
and branched out under whispering limbs
so it could linger on finger tip touches
if they pushed up the hems of her new mornings

and placed a sigh at her maybe later brim

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daark

Honeybunch
Member Rara Avis

since 2001-12-29

Posts 7115
South Africa

1 posted 2011-04-20 02:49 PM

Wonderful! Thinking of something else to say but I guess I'll just repeat myself - wonderful. Always enjoy your word ... twists.

Helen

OwlSA
Member Rara Avis

since 2005-11-07

Posts 9347
Durban, South Africa

2 posted 2011-04-20 03:15 PM

Very beautiful, naughtily sensual and very clever! Smiles.

Owl

voodootongue
Junior Member

since 2011-04-20

Posts 10
UK

3 posted 2011-04-20 03:54 PM

I loved this. Wonderful metaphor fantastically conveyed.

katahdin
Senior Member

since 2010-07-01

Posts 1196
ME. In the Shadow of the Mt.

4 posted 2011-04-20 10:33 PM

Nicely done, enjoyed!!
Kat >^..^<

Dark Stranger
Member Patricius

since 2001-03-19

Posts 13631
West Coast

5 posted 2011-04-21 07:42 AM

Helen, thank you lady

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ladyowl, thank you for the lovely eyes

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voodooT, thanks for the read and comments

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Katlady thank you for grinning in

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