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JerryPat2
Member Laureate

since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

0 posted 2011-04-16 03:51 PM

The sun awakes me in my bed,
Nightmares, shackles and all,
Are sent into netherworld,
The day makes me stand tall.

I've defeated most of my fears,
Tho I'm beseeched by night,
When bleak doors of evil swing wide,
And it's n'er a fair fight.

The sun is good, I strut my stuff,
And kill demons quite dead,
A gentle breeze blows from the south,
Storm coming neighbor said.

I have grown used to the thunder,
From south or inner soul,
The sky can warn us of dire straits,
But inner storms are cold.

I get through the day, nighttime comes,
I try to swallow fright,
Close all the drapes and lock the doors,
Hide myself for the night.

The wind blows hard, the storm is here,
My inner storm comes too.
Which is worse, which can hurt the most,
Outer blow or mammon's queue?

~ Don't insult the alligator till after you cross the river. ~

Lori Grosser Rhoden
Member Patricius

since 2009-10-10

Posts 10202
Fair to middlin' of nowhere

1 posted 2011-04-16 07:10 PM

Oh I like this one Jerry! Love the metaphor and depth. Great read!
Lori

JerryPat2
Member Laureate

since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

2 posted 2011-04-16 08:45 PM

Thank you my friend, Lori. I'm glad you found it to your liking.

~ Don't insult the alligator till after you cross the river. ~

faithmairee
Senior Member

since 2011-01-05

Posts 1441
Poe Haven, USA

3 posted 2011-04-17 12:03 PM

this one is very profound not to mention well written...i enjoyed it much

There must be a poem in here somewhere.

ethome
Member Patricius

since 2000-05-14

Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada

4 posted 2011-04-17 03:17 AM

Really like this one Jerry.
Love the contrast from night to day as a comparison of inner feelings.

Good work my friend!

Eric

Margherita
Member Seraphic

since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

5 posted 2011-04-17 06:23 AM

quote:
The sky can warn us of dire straits,
But inner storms are cold.

It is just like this, dear Jerry. And it is frightening .... that inner coldness. Good that the sun is always on time in the morning, so that we can align again to its healing energy!

Excellent work.

Love,
Margherita

JerryPat2
Member Laureate

since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

6 posted 2011-04-17 07:25 AM

Appreciate your kind words, Faith. They mean a lot.

Good morning, Eric, thank you very much for being here and reading my effort.

I thank you very much, Margherita for your input,

~ Don't insult the alligator till after you cross the river. ~

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