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Honeybunch
Member Rara Avis

since 2001-12-29

Posts 7115
South Africa

0 posted 2011-04-14 02:52 AM

The stars decided, this is it,
it's time to chase the clouds away
and show the world the glory of
resuscitated passion.

The moon in agreement
shrugged off despondency
and glowed with remembrances
of a time long past and gone.

The wind was still in honour of
time's amazing grace
that brings to all who stand and wait
the chance to start again.

And I stood beneath this canopy
immobile with the drop of cares
and fear for love's survival
piled up around my feet.

I might have glowed somewhere within,
I might have remembered you,
but with all my might I surely did
chase the clouds away!

Helen / 14 April 2011

EmmaRose
Senior Member

since 2011-03-02

Posts 1376
Midwest

1 posted 2011-04-14 07:33 AM

Most regally written with the celestial as the bearer of your lovely words

Lori Grosser Rhoden
Member Patricius

since 2009-10-10

Posts 10202
Fair to middlin' of nowhere

2 posted 2011-04-14 08:25 AM

I liked this one, it is so upbeat! Love your stuff!
Lori

jwesley
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-04-30

Posts 7563
Spring, Texas

3 posted 2011-04-14 09:29 AM

Reminds me of the attitude in 'Rocky', especially when he runs up the steps, turns around and faces the world. Well written, my friend.

j.

JerryPat2
Member Laureate

since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

4 posted 2011-04-14 12:13 PM

Nicely done, but then your poetry is always that. You meandered into the past, but the past wasn't kind and you had the strength to shoo the clouds away.

~ At the siege of Vienna in 1683 Islam seemed poised to overrun Christian Europe. We are in a new phase of a very old war. ~

Honeybunch
Member Rara Avis

since 2001-12-29

Posts 7115
South Africa

5 posted 2011-04-14 12:32 PM

Thanks everyone for your kind comments - and Jerry, you're so right about the past thing but those damn clouds have to be chased away over and over again! I think I'll just ignore them from now on.

Helen

BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

6 posted 2011-04-14 07:58 PM

Your poetry makes me feel all kinds of emotions.

Kind of happy/sad you know~

*hug*

Honeybunch
Member Rara Avis

since 2001-12-29

Posts 7115
South Africa

7 posted 2011-04-15 09:07 AM

Thanks, Bluesy. Yeah, makes me feel that way too.

Helen

ken206573
Member

since 2008-10-14

Posts 487

8 posted 2011-04-15 01:57 PM

The poem brought me a smile and delight within your words.

Honeybunch
Member Rara Avis

since 2001-12-29

Posts 7115
South Africa

9 posted 2011-04-15 02:33 PM

Thank you so much, Ken. Glad the poem brought out good stuff.

Helen

Margherita
Member Seraphic

since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

10 posted 2011-04-17 08:30 AM

quote:
And I stood beneath this canopy
immobile with the drop of cares
and fear for love's survival
piled up around my feet.

How very captivating, dear Helen, in content and poetic imagery.

... maybe it is a question of changing your interpretation of the clouds! After all you know their presence as temporary.

Love and joy.
Margherita

Honeybunch
Member Rara Avis

since 2001-12-29

Posts 7115
South Africa

11 posted 2011-04-17 01:15 PM

Thanks, dear Margherita. Yes, the world stays the same so it's always the change of interpretation (and perception) that makes the difference. Change and change again until we get it right!

Helen

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