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Tomer
Senior Member

since 2002-06-28

Posts 1168
Michigan

0 posted 2011-04-06 02:40 PM

The sax was playing
Like the old man said it would

With the breeze at the wheels of the baby carriages
The aroma of coffee sifting through
Like the beans were falling from the air

Skateboards and headphones
Shopping bags and light thin jackets
Were seen down the rows of benches
Parallel to one another

The homeless strutted through
With their beanie hats and tired blue backpacks

The smoke of cigarettes
Wafted through the air

To hands being held
While lips locked

All the while
The sax continued playing
Narrating the story of
A breezy day in April.

Margherita
Member Seraphic

since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

1 posted 2011-04-06 03:47 PM

You made me be part of the scenery and I heard the sax playing.
This is beautifully melancholic, dear Tomer.

Love,
Margherita

faithmairee
Senior Member

since 2011-01-05

Posts 1441
Poe Haven, USA

2 posted 2011-04-08 09:22 PM

i love the sound of a sax playing...your poem is filled with such rich imagery and just the right words...great wonderful poem

There must be a poem in here somewhere.

jwesley
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-04-30

Posts 7563
Spring, Texas

3 posted 2011-04-08 10:26 PM

Very nice, my friend ... and I second Margherita. Only thing missing (I'm all about food!) was the ice cream cone being licked...

j.

Tomer
Senior Member

since 2002-06-28

Posts 1168
Michigan

4 posted 2011-04-10 07:07 PM

Thanks, Margherita. Happy you could feel the scene in your head. Take care

Cheers

Tomer
Senior Member

since 2002-06-28

Posts 1168
Michigan

5 posted 2011-04-10 07:08 PM

Thanks, Faith. Hope all is well

Cheers

Tomer
Senior Member

since 2002-06-28

Posts 1168
Michigan

6 posted 2011-04-10 07:09 PM

J, appreciate the support. Sadly, its not warm enough out yet for ice cream:/ Soon enough, though.

Cheers

steavenr
Member Elite

since 2003-11-17

Posts 4058

7 posted 2011-04-11 11:24 AM

this is such a vivid portrait that you have painted here...excellent work...can still hear that wailful sound

jwesley
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-04-30

Posts 7563
Spring, Texas

8 posted 2011-04-11 11:31 AM

OOPS! We're in the 80's and more down here in the Houston area...it melts and drips off our elbows...

j.

Tomer
Senior Member

since 2002-06-28

Posts 1168
Michigan

9 posted 2011-04-13 07:19 AM

Steve, thanks for the response. Happy it resonated with you.

Cheers

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