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Baking Bread |
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rebel~angel Member
since 2006-06-20
Posts 71Iowa USA |
My momma’s been around me when I bake Often enough to know that Oops Means Theresflouronthefloor Flouronthecounter Flourintheair Flourunderthosecansofbeanssittingtherewithnospaceunderthem Flour…everywhere. Oops Means That bread dough that I left here to rise Rose a little more than I expected And is halfway to china By now. But…I’m not sure she knows That Oops Means Idon’tknowthephysics Andidon’tknowvelocity Andthemixerjustkindawent…. Oops. And oops means Iloveyoumomma, Youtaughtmehowtobake Andtyemyshoesandbrushmyhairand Iknowyouhate Being the one to clean the kitchen when I’m done. I always say I’ll do it, and I do…. Untiligetdistractedandrunoftodosomethingelseand then I come back, and you’re cleaning. If you had left it, I would have finished. I promise. Its just….there were other things to do. And momma? Oops… Doesn’t always mean a mess, a mistake. Sometimes, it means …okay, well, yes, it does mean a mess, always, but can’t we make it fun? Remember:Tuck your chin, you're going to get hurt, so expect it and be ready. You might as well see it coming. |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
a very interesting write...and after I learned to read squeezeenglish, I found it very entertaining...oops...keepsmilingandspillingtheflour |
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XGarapanX Senior Member
since 2008-06-19
Posts 1435Antarctica |
Oh my gumbo. I can't explain why but this piece truly moves my heart. I think this is very well done and conveys a serious & solemn perspective from a child's eye view. "High four" on this one (sorry, Gollum bit one of my fingers off). ·´~`·»Garapan«·´~`· "Look! Crumbs on his jacketses... Heeee took it!" |
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s1nfully_1nn0c3nt Senior Member
since 2003-10-26
Posts 1105Watertown, NY |
Ooops shouldn't always be a bad thing. Enjoyed. -Trina |
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JerryPat Senior Member
since 2010-10-30
Posts 1991Louisiana/America |
Hope that was a nice, long, crusty loaf of French bread. Suicidal twin kills sister by mistake! |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Your oops is a wonderful way of saying "I remember mama..."  Enjoyed this! |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
well "oops" isn't the word I use/d....and mom would cover her ears with her hands and say "oh lord he broke something" and run for another room. enjoyed this reb |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
A pleasure to read...reminds me why I never bake bread...actually I have baked the frozen loaf kind and its delicious hot with butter...James |
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latearrival Member Ascendant
since 2003-03-21
Posts 5499Florida |
Very cute and clever. I loved the runonwords because it is you, always on the run having many things to do at once. latearrival. |
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Alison 
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
I really like this - it reminds me of me when I try to make a pie shell. I can bake bread really well, but biscuits and pie shells? Oh man, I am more like Dark. Cover your ears and duck because the flour is flying! Alison |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
Oops what you've done here is write a magical poem about baking bread and love. |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
I could never have the talent to bake but this poem is great! Eric Love does not look after it's own interests. |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Beautiful and excellent, both on many levels. I envy you. Owl |
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Huan Yi Member Ascendant
since 2004-10-12
Posts 6688Waukegan |
. This is very good John . |
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