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Story of a worm
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Story of a worm |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa 
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So to the surface came a worm to see what it could see hoping that the top-side was the same as underground. There was light, indeed there was, but harsh and stark it couldn't see the inner meaningful. It wiggled, squirmed, and made its way in circles round the scene pushing, pushing, dirt away but still it couldn't see. Poor little worm heart sore now simply disappeared and I looked, you know, like woman do but I know it went down deep. Little worms are happy there where the light of day can't reach and blind it to the inner truth of he who walks top-side. Born to be one in the light I'm yet like a worm sometimes because I love you, truly love you, when I disappear down deep! Helen / 5 April 2011 |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ms Helen...it is a treat to watch you wiggle through this one..so careful to whisper. very cool stuff lady |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
Thank you, Mr. Dark! I do so appreciate the read. Helen |
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faithmairee Senior Member
since 2011-01-05
Posts 1441Poe Haven, USA |
i love where you went with this...i admit the ending was unexpected but i like it...very nice work! There must be a poem in here somewhere. |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Everyone needs an escape hatch to crawl into, Helen, and it seems you have perfected one for yourself. ~ If you don't want gays in the military, make the uniforms ugly. ~ |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
this was...so...so...so...wormful  I guess you could call it larvalous ...ok, I'll stop now |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Now, if that little worm could imagine how he inspired you, he would swiftly come up again into the light and cheer you up. Love is light and it penetrates all darkness, the worm knows. And you know too. This was great! Love, Margherita |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
Thank you all so much for your comments and, Steaven, thank you for the smile you brought to my face. Dear Margherita - Such a busy worm it was too - made me feel lazy just sitting there watching it. The pleasures of retirement! Helen |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Helen, a charming write. I'm so glad you didn't get picked off by the Robins now abundant in the yards!   |
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Alison 
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
I have a worm bin of composting worms ... grins ... in my house. And, I love my worms. What an interesting poem, Helen. I loved how you wrapped the emotion and comparison to you with those wormy buggers. Thank you for sharing with us. Alison |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
Sunshine - No bird could fly away with me and if they tried for the worm - well, they would have had to get past me first!Alison - My son has a worm bin as well but in the garage. I haven't met them yet. Thank you for enjoying my story.Helen |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
I named mine!  All the Daddy worms are Bobby. Mommy worms are Susie. Daughter and son are Cindy and Craig. Now please don't ask me which is which. I just call them and they come - or hide. Some are shy, you know. A |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
I bet you have some wonderful conversations with the ones who aren't shy. I know I would - they'd know all my "secrets". Say Hi to the family from me. Helen |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
This poem worms the cockles of my heart... I've learned so much this morning. ALison names her worms. Helen talks to them and tells them her secrets. No wonder they stay underground as much as they can!!!!!  |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
Balladeer -  Ain't life wonderful? Helen |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Nicely done! Loved the ending ... j. |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Multi-faceted work here, Helen, a lot can be derived from the worms plight. |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
Oh, the two J's! Thank you both very much - and, yes, Jerry, so much to learn from the seemingly most insignificant things.Helen |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
So many good thoughts, love the analogy and all that it implies. This was fun while leaving much to ponder. Hugs, Helen~ |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Helen...Digging in the earth brings pleasure to many ... for in the dark cool loam under there, the quiet gives up secrets. I loved your worm story. |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
Thanks, Lori and Martie. I surely never thought I'd ever write a story about a worm but ... life is full of surprises.  Helen |
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