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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
slip away silently soft-sink 'neath sunset's sullen shadow cast along horizon's end zone into the realm of themes forgotten slip away softly silent-shed the rush of rhymes remembered hurled to the regions of pleasant parlays along the shores of sonnets sung slip away serenely sure-shed sentiments of tethered testings thrown to the winds of longings lengthened upon the sands of a future forlorn slip away, slip away, slip away so sweet, so safe, so still |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
A wonderful meditative poem, dear Steaven. Just after my heart, as I do slip away every now and then into the "gap". Love, Margherita |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Aye. And slipping away to a time other than now is a pleasurable affair to be sure. Sometimes we may blur parts of the slipping away, and sometimes we may make the ordinary intense, but it is our time to do what we do best, and that is to slip away. Enjoyed the hell outta this 'un, steavenr, ~ If you don't want gays in the military, make the uniforms ugly. ~ |
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Spiros Zafiris Senior Member
since 2002-10-20
Posts 982Canada |
.yes, very songlike and calming..>>spiros |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
A joy to read, Steaven. Ida |
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Alison 
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
Beautifully written, Steaven. Love the alliterative style. A |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
Margherita, thank you for your kindness. It is appreciated from a kindred spirit. Jerry, thank you for the high praise. I am honored. Spiros, thank you and if you saw that in it, then I have succeeded. Ida, thank you. I do appreciate your kind remarks. Alison, thank you for noticing. Sometimes I am swept away with certain poetic elements. Alliteration is a favorite.  |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
Hi, Steaven. I guess if we didn't all slip away every now and again we'd end up in an insane asylum. Really, really, a great write! Helen |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
Helen, sometimes I wonder...is the insanity in not slipping away or in returning once we have...thank you for your keen & kind observations |
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faithmairee Senior Member
since 2011-01-05
Posts 1441Poe Haven, USA |
great diction and use of aliteration...masterfully penned, my friend There must be a poem in here somewhere. |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
faith, thank you for being so nice with your remarks |
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