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the man i would be
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the man i would be |
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twistedpup Member
since 2011-02-25
Posts 115 |
The man i would be... would wake up in the morning strech shower and do my thing. I wouldnt sit and pee. I play video games more then watch tv. I'd work hard and play just as hard, kinda like i do already. The man i would be... Would try to understand her needs, give her everything, show her she means the world to me. I wouldn't take her for granted, i'd listen, when she vented. The man i would be... Being the best man i could be. Be her hero, not her criptinite I wouldnt make her cry, if she did, and it was over me, i'd apologize. The man i would be... Would txt her just to say hi See how she is, how her day is going. Wouldnt get upset over the little things. Let her hang with who ever she wanted, give her the benefit of the doubt, just like she'd give me. The man i would be... Is all the things listed above, just these things mean the world to a girl like me. The man i would be, would give this poem another read. *hugs* |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Very interesting perspective Twisted. I really like how the ending brought me around to another aspect of appreciation. Eric |
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Alison 
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
Yep, me too. Very interesting. Alison |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Not that I am a man, but I gave the poem another read anyway! I think what you are saying (and that is nothing about confusing your gender at all), is that you are very much a girl or woman, but that you don't like certain things about boys/men (or some boys/men, or most likely, one particular boy/man) and you are saying that if you were him that is how you would be - in other words that is how you would like him to be - and that you aren't asking for something that is difficult or that you couldn't be yourself if you were him. Owl |
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gordmer Junior Member
since 2011-01-15
Posts 18Ontario, Canada |
loved it... and I am a man,,, |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Well, sitting and peeing doesn't wouldn't make the man you would be any less... The man you would be seems to have 'his/her' soul in the right place, and that's what counts. Enjoyed reading this and about the butterfly, my friend. j. |
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twistedpup Member
since 2011-02-25
Posts 115 |
thank you all so much, these were the best feedback/comments to read ive gotten yet. also, this poem was directed to a couple of men in my life actually. again thank you and i hope you all keep reading my work. *hugs* |
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porky118 Junior Member
since 2011-03-31
Posts 15minnesota |
i liked this one very much i am a man and i read this atleat 4 times. the men this is directed toward in ur life right now need to shape up or lose you and i know i dont wanna lose you |
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