vulgar vows of sister twain

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Dark Stranger
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0 posted 2011-06-16 07:54 AM

she said she always used to think of leaving
of catching a ride out of this city
but she lived on a dead end street
in a south central el nowhere town

said there is a lot more traffic now
from that mexican family, family owned
mortuary that sends their cadillacs down
every week or two to the restful pines

to drop off another of her neighbors
that died from too much lead in the blood
or from finally being a little too slow
to cut another before being cut themselves

said she plants flowers now in her yard
so she won't have to buy quite so many
and will have a few nickels left around
to pay in full for her own black car ride

she said she never thinks of leaving now

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daark (highway series)

[This message has been edited by Dark Stranger (06-16-2011 12:20 PM).]

Sunshine

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1 posted 2011-06-16 01:09 PM

No, she can't leave...
she's responsible now
for picking up the pieces
and saying the prayers
and laying the flowers
before they die a natural death.

Well done, m'friend.

Dark Stranger
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West Coast

2 posted 2011-06-16 01:20 PM

thanks to you, nice lady sun..

Alison

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3 posted 2011-06-17 12:18 PM

I wonder where she would go if she could. Maybe some place where she could plant flowers simply to enjoy their beauty.

I like this, DS.

Ali-san

Margherita
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since 2003-02-08

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4 posted 2011-06-17 12:49 PM

You have caught the bitter truth of aging in this impressively realistic poem. Funerals become more numerous and sister twain slowly gets used to the thought of leaving ... not to move to another place down here, but to simply move on.

I do believe she does enjoy her flowers, even if she planted them for a special purpose. They show us the natural process in such a touching way, blooming with passion and withering with grace ...

You moved me with this outstanding write.

Love,
Margherita

serenity blaze
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5 posted 2011-06-17 04:04 AM

You touch my spirit.

(sounds so corny but it's true...)

I feel so fortunate to have read you for so many years--thank you.

Dark Stranger
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West Coast

6 posted 2011-06-17 06:22 AM

ms ali-san, thank you for the like little one...you are a blessing

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ms mar, thanks to you lady friend for your reads and comments.

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serene 1..you grace my humble pen with your eyes and leave superglue on my chapstick...thanks special lady

Namyh
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7 posted 2011-06-17 06:01 PM

Dark Stranger - We can so easily become resigned to our fate and relinguish our dreams. This was an intriguing work. Namyh

Dark Stranger
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8 posted 2011-06-17 06:05 PM

Thanks friend

katahdin
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9 posted 2011-06-17 07:25 PM

I agree with everyone here, not much more to say except Nicely done, enjoyed.
Kat >^..^<

Dark Stranger
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10 posted 2011-06-18 07:25 AM

thanks kat..

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