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First Deadly Sin . . . Pride
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First Deadly Sin . . . Pride |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana 
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deliriously gifted and self absorbed sits like a pasha waiting for figs and tea to be served born lacking the capability of care about others a unimportant man serving noble causes his self-esteem infuriating as Chinese arithmetic no man on earth is worth his worth hepatitis of the ego inward turned eyes finds no soul symphony in his head beats out rhythm of his importance most used word . . . I he thinks he's swell self-esteem hell grossly overweight in the id region of his brain degree from college of me mind altering course on conceit and/or smugness illegal drugs not nearly as deadly his flame burns with egotistical chutzpah, concealing goodness like brontosaurus foreskin we look at you and we see through you feel important like leaders of tiny nations bluster and rant with rodent-like characteristics smiling a smile that never reaches your eyes you think you are larger than God you touch yourself your soul's bereft you sport pawnshop brass balls unflattering nymphomaniac of self-esteem church of the condescending your luminosity glows with superciliousness shallow man, gloms onto whatever makes him bigger than the rest never content image for rent no one can see the true scope of this man he belittles Donne's adage no man is an island the five senses not nearly enough to appreciate the magnitude of this man with the cutthroat glare proud to a fault himself exalt vast mind of bravura desolation he tends to his own chamber of commerce his gaze locked inward serial narcissistically predisposed spent his whole life compulsively seeking outward meaning when, at the end life was pretend ~ My grandmother is over eighty and still doesn't need glasses. Drinks right out of the bottle. ~ |
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Lori Grosser Rhoden Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202Fair to middlin' of nowhere |
Wow! I immediately thought of Libya. Your descriptive phrases here are treasures. Go Jerry! Lori |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Thank you Lori. ~ My grandmother is over eighty and still doesn't need glasses. Drinks right out of the bottle. ~ [This message has been edited by JerryPat2 (03-19-2011 06:52 PM).] |
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Spiros Zafiris Senior Member
since 2002-10-20
Posts 982Canada |
..yes, well-written; entertaining; epic.. ..spiros ---------- |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Thank you, Spiros. ~ My grandmother is over eighty and still doesn't need glasses. Drinks right out of the bottle. ~ |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Nice writing...James |
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katahdin Senior Member
since 2010-07-01
Posts 1196ME. In the Shadow of the Mt. |
WOW is right! I agree with Lori. Nicely done! Kat >^..^< |
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dreamgal Member
since 2011-03-17
Posts 442 |
Definetly worth reading Jerry! |
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s1nfully_1nn0c3nt Senior Member
since 2003-10-26
Posts 1105Watertown, NY |
inward turned eyes finds no soul I love that line. Your descriptions of this man are spot on. Always enjoy the treats you leave.  on a side note : I've often thought about doing a series of pieces with each of the seven sins as the topic, I just never got to it. procrastination at its best! lol -Trina |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
"I've often thought about doing a series of pieces with each of the seven sins as the topic, I just never got to it. procrastination at its best!" Nothing like the present, you can never be sure of tomorrow. I thank you for your kind remarks, Trina. ~ Look hard behind you and you'll be able to maneuver around the pitfalls ahead of you. ~ |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Thank you Kat . . . ~ Look hard behind you and you'll be able to maneuver around the pitfalls ahead of you. ~ |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Thank you dreamgal. ~ Look hard behind you and you'll be able to maneuver around the pitfalls ahead of you. ~ |
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