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they brought us the wind
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they brought us the wind |
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Shahrazad New Member
since 2011-03-11
Posts 4USA |
Hello again! Here's another I wrote a little while ago! Hope you guys like it! they brought us the wind the sounds of footsteps overwhelm the fire the clouds of smoke, the fear of irrelevance daring to leave behind what generations could not sharing an elusive dream of changing can’ts to wills maybes to certainty, as rocks change from anger to doves to rocks again bring me the wind, the strength of a thousand songs a thousand tears, a thousand declarations let it guide me down the path of a thousand wounds ending in relief of making it there alive we taught ourselves what the beast would not that we live, we cry, we breathe, we walk to the beat of infinite drums. Thanks! |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
"let it guide me down the path of a thousand wounds" ...there is a depth here and in other places that may take a few more reads to appreciate, but I for one am willing to go down that path  nice write |
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easy1 Senior Member
since 2010-05-22
Posts 1209Southeastern USA |
This is well-crafted, with many good, strong, and even sharp images coming to mind upon reading. The words flow well together, with resonance and wit. Sow the wind, reap the whirlwind, yet remember the still, small voice... |
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