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Word Weaver
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since 2011-03-06

Posts 437
California, USA

0 posted 2011-03-06 03:26 PM

Long did I linger midst
the dark, damp forest of despair
unaware if the sun was shining above.
The dense foliage forming
a canopy overhead covering
the sky with outstretched
moss-draped arms
fingers reaching out
as if to envelope me.
The ground underfoot strewn
with molded pine cones.
The oppresive surroundings
leaving a bitter taste on the tongue.
Thick air resonating with sounds
of loons in a faraway pond.
Longing for home I make my way back
arriving to find a winter rose
blooming in the sun
and in the mail... a letter from you.

secondhanddreampoet
Member Ascendant

since 2006-11-07

Posts 6394
a 'Universalist' !

1 posted 2011-03-06 04:02 PM

pleasant imagery and 'Romanticism' !

Balladeer

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-05

Posts 25505
Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA

2 posted 2011-03-06 04:58 PM

Yes, a letter, a smile, a kind word or even a thought from a special person can bring that sun back again....you say it very well.

BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

3 posted 2011-03-06 05:49 PM

Well now, this is very special.
Your ending gave me such a good feeling.

What a treat to read.

Sunshine

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Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

4 posted 2011-03-06 08:14 PM

Marcia,

This brought to mind a visit
to the redwoods area of California...
a long time ago place where I once
grew up...

but I've grown up in several areas since,
but nothing brings to mind more than
the pungent smells of redwood, cedar, and
eternal growth!

" It matters not this distance now " Excerpt, Yesterday's Love
~*~
KRJ

OwlSA
Member Rara Avis

since 2005-11-07

Posts 9347
Durban, South Africa

5 posted 2011-03-07 05:00 PM

This is lovely Word Weaver, though I must confess, I enjoyed the forest far more than I believe you intended your readers to, in this particular poem, because of its metaphorical significance. I am a forest person - although I love grasslands and sunshine very much as well.

Owl

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

6 posted 2011-03-07 06:21 PM

Nice...James

steavenr
Member Elite

since 2003-11-17

Posts 4058

7 posted 2011-03-07 08:41 PM

well-crafted write...maneuvering the reader to such an exquisite ending...makes me want to applaud the fact that all now is right with the world, regardless of...well done

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