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EmmaRose
Senior Member

since 2011-03-02

Posts 1376
Midwest

0 posted 2011-03-06 09:08 AM

The i's never dotted

you were sunlight
and shadow, and I
rode the seasaw

the bills never paid
the soup lost
its letters

you were a Patriot
tailgating
I was a poet

so you flew
and I swallowed
my pride and my
glory

years pass, and I'm
rhyming

in the haze of forgiveness

as all turns to love
in the twilight revision

your i's never dotted

and you never looked
finer.

ethome
Member Patricius

since 2000-05-14

Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada

1 posted 2011-03-06 12:29 PM

Nothing's ever perfect.
Love him for the rest of your vision.
You have it made in the long run.
Nice to read you here at PIP.

You're a very interesting writer and that's always good!

Eric

true love never looks after it's own interests

2islander2
Member Ascendant

since 2008-03-12

Posts 6825
by the sea

2 posted 2011-03-06 12:57 PM

I loved it, a life story that grasped my interest, thanks for the beautiful write and the very enjoyable share.

Word Weaver
Member

since 2011-03-06

Posts 437
California, USA

3 posted 2011-03-06 03:16 PM

I love this poem. It speaks of uncondional love in a gifted poet's voice. BRAVO!

BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

4 posted 2011-03-06 05:46 PM

I am so enjoying your poetry.

Beautifully done, EmmaRose~

Richy
Member Elite

since 2003-05-03

Posts 3050

5 posted 2011-03-06 09:58 PM

Ayyye... this is sooo good... it speaks to me like an old friend, I love how there is a story in every verse, one that I can understand, at least for me... I'm very impressed and excited to read you in the future.

Richard

OwlSA
Member Rara Avis

since 2005-11-07

Posts 9347
Durban, South Africa

6 posted 2011-03-07 04:54 PM

This is very beautifully expressed, EmmaRose. Just a word of caution and advice, if you want it, from an old nanny goat - nobody should ever lose him/herself in the mists of another - everyone is far too important for that.

Owl

twistedpup
Member

since 2011-02-25

Posts 115

7 posted 2011-03-07 06:05 PM

that one made me think, i liked this poem very much, thank you for sharing it.

*hugs*

steavenr
Member Elite

since 2003-11-17

Posts 4058

8 posted 2011-03-07 08:50 PM

there's a lot to this one...nicely done (as someone else has said...makes me think)

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