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EmmaRose Senior Member
since 2011-03-02
Posts 1376Midwest 
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In its duration I endured, climbing the steep hill tumbling at times caught in a mirror of love and deception your wayward style my own misgivings slap of water upon stone, I was pinned, held captive unloved, unforgiven yet I claimed victory albeit a tepid one finally, the radiance of sun, warms my face this cold morning. [This message has been edited by EmmaRose (03-05-2011 04:18 PM).] |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Welcome to the blue sea, EmmaRose~~ This is a stunning, bittersweet, beauty! Your word choice is concise and cuts to the quick. However, there is alot to be said for basking in the warmth of the sun and all that your closing lines imply. Beautifully done, enjoyed, very very much!! |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
welcome to PIP! lovely first poem with a good ending |
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Goldenrose Member Elite
since 2003-05-30
Posts 3665 |
Welcome to PIP and thank you for this very good poem. If written from your own experiance it feels cathartic, like a release from dark and lonely days, to newer days in the sunshine and with the sunshine, new hope for whatever may come, be it love, laughter or just plain life without the dark times. Thought provoking, thank you. Goldenrose. Friendship is Love without his wings. Lord Byron. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Emma, welcome to Passions! Please, check your email for a Very Special Greeting! " It matters not this distance now " Excerpt, Yesterday's Love |
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EmmaRose Senior Member
since 2011-03-02
Posts 1376Midwest |
Thank you so much for the welcoming and for reading my words. Much appreciated  EmmaRose |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Greetings and salutations, EmmaRose. Welcome aboard the PiP Ship!  Some love mountains are harder to climb than others but when we reach the summit, we know the sun is there! ~ Even when it is hiding behind the clouds as we're trudging along. it will eventually come out and then all our troubles seem to drift away! Bask in the radiance of the sun! All is well! I enjoyed your poem EmmaRose. Be happy! You deserve it! Love & Light, Earth Angel  |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Welcome to PIP Emma. This poem you've written is really vividly passioned with crisp biting thoughts. I like these.. "your wayward style my own misgivings slap of water upon stone, I was pinned, held captive" Nice work! Eric true love never looks after it's own interests |
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faithmairee Senior Member
since 2011-01-05
Posts 1441Poe Haven, USA |
Welcome to the blue room. I enjoyed your poem very much. It's really great. I look forward to reading more of your work. There must be a poem in here somewhere. |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Welcome to our world Emma...and I see you write the flip side as well...water cascading can set you free as well as pin you down...nice write |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
once again, welcome...loved this phrase: "slap of water upon stone, I was pinned, held captive" ...so powerfully intriguing...so captivating...nice lines |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
You have a definite way with biting the words off within the reader's gaze. You expect to read "this" and you wind up with "that." That is better every time. Like your style. ~ Never did I feel more devoted to my wife than after biting the wild garlic of treachery ~ |
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Richy Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 3050 |
First of all, I love the name Emma, and second, I love the poem. Don't even think about leaving here, believe me I've tried, they'll find your spirit wherever you are, and drag you back here where you belong... In case you didn't realize it, you just joined, a lifelong group. How little you know now, how lucky you are. Richard |
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EmmaRose Senior Member
since 2011-03-02
Posts 1376Midwest |
Thank you again for your vivid replies and welcoming spirit. I think I will stick around a while |
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Albert J. Allie Senior Member
since 2003-02-13
Posts 512Queens NY |
I agree.... slap of water upon stone, I was pinned, held captive" Wonderfully expressed.... |
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naturegirl Member
since 2009-09-30
Posts 168England |
I'm dipping back in after a brief absence & I'm really glad I didn't miss this. Feeling the bittersweet with the honey of success, tepid or not your words feel right, they hit the spot & are very well expressed - sorry this is a bit late but hoping to hear more from you.x |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
Beautiful write, EmmaRose. (what a lovely name) Ida |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Your work is lovely dear EmmaRose. The "captive on stone" reminded me of something from mythology--but I'm having brain fog today. I'll come back when I remember. I very much enjoyed this. The symbolism is exquisite.  |
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Klassy Lassy Member Elite
since 2005-06-28
Posts 2187Oregon |
Hello Emma! Your poem shows a courageous heart, and the sting of tears. May you partner with sun, and welcome to the warmth of these pages, too!  KL[This message has been edited by Klassy Lassy (04-03-2011 09:27 AM).] |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ms er..welcome to the bluehuezoo...your pen is perky and jagged edged..a pleasure to feel it dragging across the tongue of my eyes.. |
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Alison 
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
EmmaRose, I don't know how I missed this poem earlier, but I am glad that I found it now. It's a great introduction of you to the blue world of PiP. I am enjoying you being among us. Alison |
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EmmaRose Senior Member
since 2011-03-02
Posts 1376Midwest |
Thanks so much for the royal welcome Seems like a great place to hang my hat for a long while |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Oh, the sun is healing in many ways, really. This is a wonderful first offering, missed it when you posted it, sorry. But here I am, thoroughly appreciating your words. This is an exquisite poem. Love, Margherita |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
You go, girl! Congratu-jolly-lations! Pretty much what you said in a reply to one of my poems today (well, I saw it today - have had no Internet connection at all for days!) Lovely poem too. Don't know how I missed it the first time round. Owl |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Beautiful my friend. Loved the ending too. j. |
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Fabiani Member
since 2006-05-12
Posts 123Mesa, Az |
Love your Vocabulary Liked this very much It's time to rethink every fact that is imaginable |
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