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crazy love |
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faithmairee Senior Member
since 2011-01-05
Posts 1441Poe Haven, USA 
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this feels awful i'm not sure loving you is worth the pain you can either make or break my day by your attention or lack of it you are quickly becoming something close to an obsession i like everything there is about you your eyes say it all you move about zombie-like my enchanted master deep down i know you lack the courage to tell it like it is so instead you stare sometimes winking at your love slave willing to risk nothing you can keep your hungry eyes and empty arms your well-kept secrets i'll keep my fantasies and shattered dreams then crawl back into my shell and silently mourn for the love which is just out of my reach There must be a poem in here somewhere. |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
lots of good lines and well turned phrases...too many to cut and paste...as my kids use to say...it's all good  |
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Rainbowdust Member
since 2002-12-05
Posts 320Sydney, Australia |
Wow feel like you wrote this one straight out of my life! Enjoyed and beautifully expressed! He doesn't know what he's missing.... The soul would have no rainbows, had the eyes no tears. |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
It is sad,I feel such things sometimes and it is beautifully expressed, I guess we share love in some strange way when we are in love, thanks for the lovely words and poem. yann |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
oooooh that is just so damn sad. I don't know what to write. You captured the pain so well in this poem....Feel bad for your frustration. Eric the writer views a critic like a fire hydrant would view a dog |
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Lori Grosser Rhoden Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202Fair to middlin' of nowhere |
I'm with Eric on this one! Good write Faith Lori |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Only you can know the time when it is the time to pull the plug, Faith. ~ Never did I feel more devoted to my wife than after biting the wild garlic of treachery ~ |
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faithmairee Senior Member
since 2011-01-05
Posts 1441Poe Haven, USA |
thank you all so much for your wonderful remarks. I appreciate each of you so much. There must be a poem in here somewhere. |
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