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Sibling Complexity (Rondeau with the PW)
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Sibling Complexity (Rondeau with the PW) |
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Alison 
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! 
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Sibling Complexity Love does not end when sisters fight It grows from pain, then hides from sight As dried up laughter fills the cracks From bitter words that weren’t held back And endless pride trumps over right. A sister's love is tangled tight By tattered thoughts prone to ignite From heated words - restraint they lack. Love does not end … The feelings weave with subtle might They spring from dreams that fill the night To hush the cries and dry tear tracks To heal the wounds from each attack Then pain will dim as hope grows bright. Love does not end … - Alison |
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Yoinn Senior Member
since 2007-08-16
Posts 649Michigan |
I feel your pain in this one alison. I have 5 sisters and despite the bad times you are so right. love does not end. Yoin Just reworked my old poetry page. Check it out before geocities takes it down. Yoin |
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miscellanea Member Elite
since 2004-06-24
Posts 4060OH |
The title tells it all, doesn't it. Very nicely word, Alison! a pleasure to read; miscellaena |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Yes, this is excellent. Love does not end.  |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
It is painful but it is love indeed as difficult as times could be |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
hello Alison, as we grow up, we make our life far from our brothers and sisters (i have 6), but we can't forget our childhood with these very important persons...as you say, they can be some arguments, love is still there because a family is the most special thing for people....Stay strong, no hard feeling and be confident and let her fly, she will always be your sister..I hope things will improve... regards yann |
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brneyedgrly Senior Member
since 2009-06-08
Posts 1125nowhere and everywhere |
beautiful rondeau, a (& p)... you have such natural talent with these styles, allison...i am envious of how you can still get your point across with the structure. nice job! shel don't wait for the storms to end~ |
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Billie Cullimore Member
since 2009-03-27
Posts 315 |
Your poem has a great deal of meaning for me. I am the youngest of ten siblings. I had five older sisters, one still living, you did a beautiful job of expressing the feelings of sisters. Thanks for this lovely work. Billie C. |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Impressively well done, dear Alison. Truth flows within your words. Love, Margherita |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Well said...James |
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Kaoru
since 2003-06-07
Posts 3892where the wild flowers grow |
"It grows from pain, then hides from sight" So, so true. |
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unboundpoetess Member
since 2008-05-24
Posts 477 |
You can't know what this means to me right now. Wonderful, Alison. (you share my sister's name) Love, Heather |
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Robert E. Jordan Member Rara Avis
since 2008-01-25
Posts 8541Philadelphia, Pennsylvania |
Yo dear Alison, I'm an only child, so I don't gat it all. What's a "PW"? Love Bobby |
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Oklahoma Rose Senior Member
since 2008-02-28
Posts 1586Oklahoma USA |
That is so true, Alison. Even though, my baby sister hasn't had anything to do with me, or the reast of my family for over 20 years, I still love her and wish her well. |
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LindsayP Member Elite
since 2007-07-28
Posts 3410Australia, Victoria |
Dear Alison, that is brilliant. It is one of your very best, I just loved it, a real delight to read, thank you, love. Lindsay |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Sisterly love is a precious gift, and you have conveyed the complexity and unconditional love that it's tied to and with. My sisters are an endless joy to me and I so appreciate this sweet heart of a poem you have penned. |
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D.Lester Young Senior Member
since 2001-12-08
Posts 1219Austin, Tx |
Beautiful verse sailing the love of two sisters. |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
I only have brothers and always wanted a sister but I think I understand what you are saying. I hope things improve on the sister front. Ida |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
I can't believe that I did not thank anyone for commenting on this poem. My apologies for being so incredibly rude. --- Yoinn, Thank you. This was painful to write, but it felt good to write it. I appreciate your understanding and you reading it. Alison - misc, It does tell it all. I think that sisters have the most complex relationship of all family members. That's how I see it anyway. Thankly (typo, but I kind of liked it) you. Alison - TD, Nope it doesn't end. Thank you. A - inky one, I think that is what makes us grow. You think? Thank you for reading. Alison - yann, Thank you. I am trying. You are right though, we share a history that I share with no one else. That's a pretty cool thing. xoxoxo Alison - shel, It's not natural, but thank you for saying so. I have cried buckets to try to learn this meter, feet, rhyme thing. I hope I am coming along. It's good to have you in the workshop too. xoxoxo Alison - Billie, Thank you. It's a joy to have you among us. I love your poetry that you wrote when you were a girl. Those are so special. Hugs to you, Alison - Thank you, Margherita. Truth and tears. xoxoxo Alison - James, Thank you. A - Karou, Yep and thank you for reading and commenting. Alison - Heather, I am happy if this poem touched you. I am also proud to share your sister's name. That's very special .. does she spell it the same way? Hugs, A - Bobby, It's okay - we get lots of other things together. PW is the Poetry Workshop. xoxoxo Alison - Sue, Thank you - for this comment and all the other supportive and warm comments you have given me. xoxoxo Alison - Lindsay, You made me smile. Big!  xoxoxo Alison - Thank you, Blues Serenade. My sisters and I have a very ... up and down relationship. I envy you - but wouldn't trade my sisters. I would sell them though. Interested? xoxoxo Alison - D. Lester Young, Thank you for stopping in. Yes, this is about two sisters. There are four of us and we all are very .. interesting. Alison - Thank you, Ida. Wanna adopt me? I'll play nice. I promise. xoxoxo Alison |
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