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WindWalker
Senior Member

since 2001-10-12

Posts 1218

0 posted 2009-06-10 12:03 PM

Worn-out Coat

Years of taking, years of greed unchecked
leave a rich man's coat threadbare,
with open seams and little warmth.
Faced with bitter winter winds,
vulnerable, fearful, apprehensive,
the rich man does not part easily
with outmoded ways and worn-out rags.
He hugs himself in tattered remains
of pride and prejudice.

He shivers in bitterness,
knows the inevitable is nigh:
the cold winds of his dying ways
end his money-powered life:
the worn-out coat disintegrates
as a new sun unleashes it's warmth.

Survivors of his downfall,
who struggled; who did it with so little;
those denied the warmth and comfort
of the old winter coat in its prime
are thankful now they were not taken in
by false claims of earthly wealth
for now, in peace and comfort
they walk the shining new earth:

The rich man’s grave sprouts flowers
which children pick for their mothers

ziad
Junior Member

since 2009-05-23

Posts 15
London, England

1 posted 2009-06-10 04:43 PM

that was fantastic... really good write (and read)

steavenr
Member Elite

since 2003-11-17

Posts 4058

2 posted 2009-06-10 06:05 PM

"He hugs himself in tattered remains
of pride and prejudice"

the mental acuity of this line alone is astounding...going back for seconds (or thirds, or more)

BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

3 posted 2009-06-12 09:22 PM

Life is so complex and yet so simple....
human nature is truly a force to reckon with.

Love your thoughts here, and the way you told this.

playing.with.crayons
Member

since 2006-01-02

Posts 362
Neverland

4 posted 2009-06-12 09:27 PM

"The rich man’s grave sprouts flowers
which children pick for their mothers"

sigh. I've missed this place.

what a wonderful write, and I agree with every word!!

-Cheye

Robert E. Jordan
Member Rara Avis

since 2008-01-25

Posts 8541
Philadelphia, Pennsylvania

5 posted 2009-06-12 09:37 PM

Yo WindWalker,

I think he should buy a new coat. It is a nice metaphor though.

I've been there for the flower stealing bit.

Bobby

secondhanddreampoet
Member Ascendant

since 2006-11-07

Posts 6394
a 'Universalist' !

6 posted 2009-06-14 08:06 AM

effective 'write'!

I am particularly fond of several ending lines:

"...the shining new earth:

The rich man’s grave sprouts flowers
which children pick for their mothers"

applause!!

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