Open Poetry #45 |
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In Memoriam |
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Huan Yi Member Ascendant
since 2004-10-12
Posts 6688Waukegan ![]() |
. How sad it is A leaf Falling from its tree A wave Lapping on the shore The sun going down On another day Not caring for you Anymore . |
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Yoinn Senior Member
since 2007-08-16
Posts 649Michigan |
Nicely Done Yoin |
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OldPoet Member
since 2009-06-30
Posts 112The Left Coast |
You know, it can be so easy to dismiss a short poem like this. A quick read and then off to another. But even though this poem speaks softly, it speaks with a pathos that is uncommon among today's would-be poets. Way too often a person feeling some degree of despair will over-write his/her feelings and then deliver a very bad over-long poem to some forum. This is just not the case with this poignant verse. Short, tart, and full of impact - it's a winner! |
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A Romantic Heart Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-03
Posts 5496Forever In Your Heart |
loved the way you did this~ ~ARH ![]() |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
i like very much, the passing of time, the sentiments shortly and sharply expressed, there is always harmony in your writes...For this one you expresssed it was sad but I could have considered the same happenings with happiness...Thanks for the delicious poem. yann |
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suthern![]() ![]()
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Such beautifully written finality! |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
Nicely done, John M |
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latearrival Member Ascendant
since 2003-03-21
Posts 5499Florida |
enjoying your thoughts. latearrival |
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GBride Senior Member
since 2009-07-02
Posts 538 |
simple, elegant, unpretentious |
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