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Summer evening
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Summer evening |
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Heart2Heart Senior Member
since 2009-05-15
Posts 738Scotland/Norway 
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~ Summer evening ~ It is dusk and the sun has set Over the hills and tall pine trees Over the village with its shops and streets Over the loch that shines back at me All my work of the frenzied day Is now discarded and put away It is evening and the little stars Light up the sky with their gentle glow A time serene and calm and sweet A break in the humdrum world I know When I can sit in my garden chair As mellow softness fills the air If I could choose that earth stand still One moment more special than the rest If I could stop at my own free will To be alone and feel my best It would be that time, not day, not night But the hour between, the precious twilight |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Oh, the twilight, yes it is so so special, even though it brings me deep melancholy, an intense yearning for something greater and larger than us we know exists, but can't be grasped totally from down here. Wonderful poem, dear Katriona. Thank you so much for sharing it with us. Love, Margherita  |
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Chalmette Guy Senior Member
since 2009-03-11
Posts 1257Louisiana |
If I could choose that earth stand still One moment more special than the rest If I could stop at my own free will To be alone and feel my best It would be that time, not day, not night But the hour between, the precious twilight Wow, you did it again here. You captivate me with your words. |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
This is exquisite! Twilight truly is a magical moment, and you've captured it perfectly! |
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aujussy wolf
since 2003-08-09
Posts 1215Michigan |
"But the hour between, the precious twilight" I agree with you, I love the twilight time, that reminds me of the old moody blues song too! great poem heart2heart  In his mantle gray he walked one day across a shining floor and with crystal key in secrecy he opened an ivory door -J.R.R. Tolkien(T.Bombadil-the adv |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
"It would be that time, not day, not night But the hour between, the precious twilight" ...I do believe you have chosen well...and penned it well, as well...well... |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
a sweet work of poetry, summarized impressions and sensations about a short piece of day...thanks for sharing this thoughtful piece. have a nice day yann |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
Beautiful thoughts on my favorite time of day. Ida |
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Alanor Junior Member
since 2009-07-01
Posts 12 |
Scotland must be a hauntingly beautiful place... Your poem is lovely (and I know just how you feel). |
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HAZARD Junior Member
since 2009-06-24
Posts 40ENGLAND |
'The precious twilight', is a great line! There are some haunting rhymes and a sunglowing cadence about your work - it helps me see the place you are in. I also enjoy poems which have the technique of recording the everyday yet suddenly, and surprisingly, offer a telling metaphor. Philip Larkin's 'Whitsun Weddings' poem uses this idea to magnificent effect. After the train arrives his 'arrow-shower' gleams within the lines - truly pentecostal! Distant connections between life and landscape 'mind sculpture' our emotional states. In your poem I revive derelict dreams, and enjoy a samadhi coloured state. Yet this golden succour upon daily drudgery shifts in the light of other cultures. In eastern lands the quotidian in life has its purity of being. Tasks the west sees as drudgery, others feel are transmuted by repetition - ritually cleansed by constant application. Nature breaks into blossom each year - regardless of lasting drought or fire.... H |
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Oklahoma Rose Senior Member
since 2008-02-28
Posts 1586Oklahoma USA |
I love the twilight hours. Absolutely beautiful poem you wrote here. |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
This exquisite peace of heaven is as beautiful as your name, Katriona. My mother came from Scotland. One day, perhaps the crime rate in South Africa will decrease to the degree that we can sit in such tranquility twixt the two lights, too. Owl |
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Heart2Heart Senior Member
since 2009-05-15
Posts 738Scotland/Norway |
I thank each and one of your for your beautiful comments. Thanks for kind words about my name Owl, although I am Scottish, I live in Norway, and I believe I'm the only person with that name here:-) Heart2Heart |
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Heart2Heart Senior Member
since 2009-05-15
Posts 738Scotland/Norway |
PS for Owl: I just knew there had to be Scottish blood running through your veins;- something in your words, the lilting of the language perhaps:-) Katriona |
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miscellanea Member Elite
since 2004-06-24
Posts 4060OH |
A very beautiful penning! Much enjoyed! miscellanea |
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Bloodline Member
since 2009-05-23
Posts 236Oklahoma |
Heart2Heart, No image needed as your words paint a canvas for the soul, Bloodline |
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