Open Poetry #45 |
New Beginings |
martiniat8 Senior Member
since 2003-06-21
Posts 897Prague, Bohemia, Czech Republic |
Time told its tender tale of lovers mysteries and wedding veils Daunting vixen's deceitful tongue tried and tied in knots it's over and the ready steady sing life's new songs day by day |
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Sonofgloin Junior Member
since 2009-06-09
Posts 48Australia |
Time told its tender tale of lovers mysteries and wedding veils Daunting vixen's deceitful tongue tried and tied Some neat little word play, goes together well and nails the sentiment...but where is the rest? you stopped painting the picture too quickly, well that's my feeling....Paul |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
I loved the way you employed abruptness in the ending, but, I too, must confess...I was certainly left wanting for more... |
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OldPoet Member
since 2009-06-30
Posts 112The Left Coast |
It's difficult to pack so much into such brevity but you have succeeded big time. Bravo! |
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martiniat8 Senior Member
since 2003-06-21
Posts 897Prague, Bohemia, Czech Republic |
hmm, thanks for the input, I may add more and repost |
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