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Yoinn
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since 2007-08-16
Posts 649
Michigan

0 posted 2009-06-27 09:29 AM



My Sharp Knife

The Wind blows in the window
It’s cold out once again.
Late hours can always find my tired eyes.
When all else is asleep and quiet,
When others have laid down
Their head and put away
The troubles in their life,
Slowly with a cautious hand
I reach out to my pain.

With paper and pen in hand,
I step through the doorway.
Seeking to achieve understanding,
Some sort of clarity,
I relive the past and its fierce truths.

When I can take no more,
When the tears flow to hot
I slowly back my self away
And sit by the window
Once again.

The past is a sharp knife,
Useful if respected, dangerous if not.

I am careful with it.
I have to be.

It keeps me honest.



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Bloodline
Member
since 2009-05-23
Posts 236
Oklahoma
1 posted 2009-06-27 12:02 PM


Yoinn,

On the edge and tender
with honest use of
poetry, unique in approach,
enjoyed,

Bloodline

ThisDiamond
Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353
Michigan, USA
2 posted 2009-06-27 05:30 PM


Nicely done.
Couldn't pick a specific line, introspective regarding respect for the past. It is the challenges that shape us, the breaking that makes room for more...
Optimistic always.
Great Pic!

brneyedgrly
Senior Member
since 2009-06-08
Posts 1125
nowhere and everywhere
3 posted 2009-06-27 08:13 PM



When others have laid down
Their head and put away
The troubles in their life,
Slowly with a cautious hand
I reach out to my pain.

With paper and pen in hand,
I step through the doorway.
Seeking to achieve understanding,
Some sort of clarity,
I relive the past and its fierce truths.

The past is a sharp knife,
Useful if respected, dangerous if not.

I am careful with it.
I have to be.


~wow, handsome yo...

i am feeling this...i do this...

your words resonate so much with me.

i am enjoying your poetry very much!

: )


Yoinn
Senior Member
since 2007-08-16
Posts 649
Michigan
4 posted 2009-06-28 08:58 AM


Thank you Bloodline (I like that handle)

Glad you enjoyed the read.

Yoin

Yoinn
Senior Member
since 2007-08-16
Posts 649
Michigan
5 posted 2009-06-28 09:07 AM


thank You T.D.

Introspection is most often what pushes my pen around the paper. Glad you like the poem. Although many of my poems are dark I do try to put a little optimism in them all. I always write about the struggle never about giving up.

Yoin

Yoinn
Senior Member
since 2007-08-16
Posts 649
Michigan
6 posted 2009-06-28 09:27 AM


As always I appreciate your hearfelt replies brn..

I always like it when someones says they "feel" my poetry. I don't have alot of tools in my poetry toolbox. I am totaly self taught. I rhyme like a 2nd grader lol and wouldn't know how to structure a poem with a blueprint, But what I feel I can do is paint a picture for the reader to relate to. When you say you "feel" it, I think maybe i did something right.

Im enjoying your poetry alot to brn, I think we have very similar poetry cookbooks to work out of.

Yoin

LivingConfused
Junior Member
since 2009-12-27
Posts 40

7 posted 2009-12-28 12:05 PM


A work that makes me think. Two line that move me                                         "When I can take no more,
When the tears flow to hot
I slowly back my self away
And sit by the window
Once again."

This I must learn to do.

The second,

"The past is a sharp knife,
Useful if respected, dangerous if not."

I have not seen or thought of a better description for the memories of the past. Thank you.

shalisadefa
Member
since 2009-08-13
Posts 114

8 posted 2009-12-29 03:25 PM


"relive the past and its fierce truths"

Sometimes it takes guts to confront your past.
Take it one step at a time, slowly but surely, that's what my father would say.

Beautifully captured

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