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My Sharp Knife
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My Sharp Knife |
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Yoinn Senior Member
since 2007-08-16
Posts 649Michigan 
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My Sharp Knife The Wind blows in the window It’s cold out once again. Late hours can always find my tired eyes. When all else is asleep and quiet, When others have laid down Their head and put away The troubles in their life, Slowly with a cautious hand I reach out to my pain. With paper and pen in hand, I step through the doorway. Seeking to achieve understanding, Some sort of clarity, I relive the past and its fierce truths. When I can take no more, When the tears flow to hot I slowly back my self away And sit by the window Once again. The past is a sharp knife, Useful if respected, dangerous if not. I am careful with it. I have to be. It keeps me honest. |
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Bloodline Member
since 2009-05-23
Posts 236Oklahoma |
Yoinn, On the edge and tender with honest use of poetry, unique in approach, enjoyed, Bloodline |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Nicely done. Couldn't pick a specific line, introspective regarding respect for the past. It is the challenges that shape us, the breaking that makes room for more... Optimistic always. Great Pic! |
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brneyedgrly Senior Member
since 2009-06-08
Posts 1125nowhere and everywhere |
When others have laid down Their head and put away The troubles in their life, Slowly with a cautious hand I reach out to my pain. With paper and pen in hand, I step through the doorway. Seeking to achieve understanding, Some sort of clarity, I relive the past and its fierce truths. The past is a sharp knife, Useful if respected, dangerous if not. I am careful with it. I have to be. ~wow, handsome yo... i am feeling this...i do this... your words resonate so much with me. i am enjoying your poetry very much! : ) |
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Yoinn Senior Member
since 2007-08-16
Posts 649Michigan |
Thank you Bloodline (I like that handle) Glad you enjoyed the read. Yoin |
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Yoinn Senior Member
since 2007-08-16
Posts 649Michigan |
thank You T.D. Introspection is most often what pushes my pen around the paper. Glad you like the poem. Although many of my poems are dark I do try to put a little optimism in them all. I always write about the struggle never about giving up. Yoin |
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Yoinn Senior Member
since 2007-08-16
Posts 649Michigan |
As always I appreciate your hearfelt replies brn.. I always like it when someones says they "feel" my poetry. I don't have alot of tools in my poetry toolbox. I am totaly self taught. I rhyme like a 2nd grader lol and wouldn't know how to structure a poem with a blueprint, But what I feel I can do is paint a picture for the reader to relate to. When you say you "feel" it, I think maybe i did something right. Im enjoying your poetry alot to brn, I think we have very similar poetry cookbooks to work out of.  Yoin |
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LivingConfused Junior Member
since 2009-12-27
Posts 40 |
A work that makes me think. Two line that move me "When I can take no more, When the tears flow to hot I slowly back my self away And sit by the window Once again." This I must learn to do. The second, "The past is a sharp knife, Useful if respected, dangerous if not." I have not seen or thought of a better description for the memories of the past. Thank you. |
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shalisadefa Member
since 2009-08-13
Posts 114 |
"relive the past and its fierce truths" Sometimes it takes guts to confront your past. Take it one step at a time, slowly but surely, that's what my father would say. Beautifully captured |
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