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A Very Bad Year
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A Very Bad Year |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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Synchronized redundancy, ironed, starched, with sharp clean hats it's just like that *snaps* of jazz as one cool cat, nods and purrs beneath beret Adoph's youth captured the sway of the pendulum in tock: tick tick ticking "I'm a bomb" waiting for the world to say "Do not venture there at all" The field is poisoned by the grape, systemically devolved. |
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Capricious Member
since 2002-09-14
Posts 89California, USA |
This one has an edge to it. Need to mull it over a bit more, I'll get back to you ... PS: Merry belated Christmas  |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
It's just like me to forget the ell in Adolph.  And somehow, I knew you'd be here. A Miracle on any street... critique away, dear lady! Much merriness sent your way as well! (It's never too late for that!)  |
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latearrival Member Ascendant
since 2003-03-21
Posts 5499Florida |
I am reading. love you. late |
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latearrival Member Ascendant
since 2003-03-21
Posts 5499Florida |
maybe the merlot will be better in 2010. Let's hope so..love ya late, and love ya early. |
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Mysteria 
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
I hope that next year "the field" is not judged by that grape. I happen to really enjoy the wine, and occasional whine.  Loveya. |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
been a bad year here, too ~~ wishing this next one to be a better one.  M |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Your imagination is rich, fresh, and wonderfully vivid. Love the edge! |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
"ells" don't much matter when the work is as sharp as this Happy New Year |
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LivingConfused Junior Member
since 2009-12-27
Posts 40 |
As Capricious says this does have an edge. I like it. I hear a stand up bass and trumpet now and again as I read it. |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
...actualy (left the 'l' out so you wouldn't feel bad), until the jobe went away was having a good year... loved the write, my friend...always a pleasure to read you... j. |
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Chalmette Guy Senior Member
since 2009-03-11
Posts 1257Louisiana |
Wow...speechless Karen. Wow. Your mind is amazing. |
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