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When No One Wins
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When No One Wins |
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Alison 
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! 
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Our power proved to be plastic covered with false courage easy to spindle and mutilate under the pressure of shared pride Hurt feelings carved wounds stung by salted tears, falling dripping, wetting ravaged faces Nothing was won – no medals no ribbons for victories no spoils of war or winner’s celebration We only stood to lose it all - Alison |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
what a poignant write...I really liked the cadence of your second stanza...really brought life to your word choices...very nicely done |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Hurt feelings carved wounds stung by salted tears, falling dripping, wetting ravaged faces On a global level or in the most intimate relationship... there are many battles no one wins. Excellent write! *S* |
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Kaoru
since 2003-06-07
Posts 3892where the wild flowers grow |
Wow... I really am speechless, this moved me. Enjoyed. |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
To quote our Suthern One ~ "On a global level or in the most intimate relationship... there are many battles no one wins. Excellent write!" Your alliterative opening line really packed a punch! "Our power proved to be plastic" Love 'n a hug, Linda  |
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WTBAKELAR
since 2008-09-09
Posts 1089Utah, USA |
Sometimes, it is wise to carefully "choose our battles" Do we fight, just to fight, or is the battle justified? Stand up for something. Pray for victory. Learn from your loses. Touching write, Alison, Tracey. |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ms ali-san.. it was stated in the art of war, that the field of victory should always be on the opponents soil, perhaps that is all there is sometimes, not a win or lose but just keeping one occupied putting out his own fires..enjoyed your flag here babe!! |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
understanding you here hon, and loving being able to read you again. Love your pic hon!! |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
Steaven, Thank you. I had to write out a painful time. Sisters are complicated beings. Thank you again, Alison - Ruth, I think we lose most battles when they become battles. Alison - Karou, Thank you. Your comment means a great deal to me. Alison - Tracey, Isn't it sad when we are consumed by the act of battling and lose control of what we know is right? Thank you for stopping in. Alison - Daark, This friend of mine has shared a lot of thoughts with me on this subject. I listen. Sometimes, I even learn. Ali-san - Donna, Thank you. Did I tell you that I have missed you? Love, A |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Alison, I knew this was about your sister before I read your response. Are her initials OHNW? My heart goes out to you. I experience the same ache about my daughter. Warm friendly huggles Owl |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Alison - it does happen that way... BC |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
Diana, Thank you for understanding - and no, the words that being with a bold letter just describe how I felt. They are like power words - does that make sense? Love, A - BC, Yep. A |
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Nancy Hardin Member
since 2009-12-02
Posts 58Nevada, United States of America |
Alison, I think everybody can relate to this...because there are battles in every family, and nobody winds up winning. My twin granddaughters and I are currently in such a situation over their Mom. Thanks for your insight. |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
Thank you, Nancy. Sadly, things only got worse - and we lost it all. A |
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Zeigeist Member
since 2009-12-09
Posts 311Michigan |
I like this Z |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
Thank you, Z. Welcome to PiP. I can't express how honored I am that your first post here is a comment to my poem. That's a first for me, I believe. Welcome. Alison |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
wow |
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ken206573 Member
since 2008-10-14
Posts 487 |
What a powerful and enduring poem. I hope the best for you and your sister, we all have our battle's with the winner's, loser's, and withdraw's. Yet they all leave a scare. |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
easy to spindle and mutilate under the pressure of shared pride Hi Alison,I love your poem and the lesson of it, thanks yann |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
"easy to spindle and mutilate under the pressure of shared pride" powerful lines here Alison... your pain is showing |
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secondhanddreampoet Member Ascendant
since 2006-11-07
Posts 6394a 'Universalist' ! |
the raw power of fine writing is, of course, often born in the blazing crucible of personal experience ... well 'penned' ! |
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viking_metal Senior Member
since 2007-02-02
Posts 1337In a Jeep, Minnesota. |
sometimes that's all we stand to do. go on brush yo shoulda's off. Dear alaboo, this one hit home. I liked it loads. love, Paul Fall in love early, fall in love often. |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
I think there are some situations that just can't be worked out, Alison, as much as we would like that to happen. You can't really remove the burden unless someone holds up the other end. I think you expressed what you feel with great skill here. Ida |
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nourzihane Member
since 2008-07-10
Posts 254Algeria |
My dear friend... Alison... your writings are wonderful thank you Nourzihane |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
This is one of those poems that is hard to come back to. It hurts. Paul, Dixie, Kate, Ida, Ken, Yann, Bruce & nourzihane, thank you for taking the time to share your thoughts with me. Each one of you has helped the healing process just a little more. I treasure all the comments that I receive, but some poems need them more than others and this is just one of those poems. With love, Alison |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
"Hurt feelings carved wounds stung by salted tears, falling dripping, wetting ravaged faces" That is BEAUTIFUL!  "too bad ignorance isn't painful" |
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Goldenrose Member Elite
since 2003-05-30
Posts 3665 |
Such a painfully personally poem here and there is a bravery in writing it..thank you for posting ... Goldenrose. Being deeply loved by someone gives you strength,while loving someone deeply gives you courage. Lao Tzu 6th century BC. |
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