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viking_metal
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In a Jeep, Minnesota.

0 posted 2009-12-31 03:50 AM


Your stomach was flat and lean,
and it writhed as we danced
like a bucket of snakes.
Man, I wanna stick my hand in
nervous to get bit, but the blood
the blood is pumping and I can feel it
banging my head my hands my arms my legs
banging them with hammers from the inside
keeping me alive

Your stomach was flat and lean,
and it writhed as we danced
a swaying cobra.
I know the poison will kill me,
but I bet, bet the bite,
bet the bite is worth the while.
_____________________________________
bad shmabits.



Fall in love early, fall in love often.

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1 posted 2009-12-31 10:33 AM


Paul,

Step away.  Very slowly.  Step away.

Okay, I am laughing - you have written quite an analogy there.

Glad that I am working my way back to read again - dang, this one ... well, step away slowly.

A

SlowlyFallAway
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2 posted 2009-12-31 10:49 AM


The bite's not worth it, I promise. It's gonna leave a mark, and a constant reminder that you wasted your time... Once again. But on the flip side, maybe you could say another lesson learned?
viking_metal
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In a Jeep, Minnesota.
3 posted 2009-12-31 11:12 AM


Aliboohaha, Thanks very much dear. I am glad you enjoyed.
Slowlyfallaway, your concern is heartening. Thanks for reading.

Fall in love early, fall in love often.

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