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Alison

Member Rara Avis

since 2008-01-27

Posts 9318
Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy!

0 posted 2009-12-28 02:27 AM

we stuffed the salmon swollen
with wild rice, herbs and onion
dressed it loosely in a coat of foil
and laid in on low heat coals
in a campfire that lay dormant

as river currents back eddied
against silt banks, caressing sweepers
that leaned dangerously
into the water, dancing to river song

on a sand island, we lay under the sun
as it bedded behind the mountain
on sands cooled by evening air
he touched a part of me
that i held close and lonely

the fish slow-baked into the night
forgotten as fingers trailed stories
and teased bodies to dance
into a dawn of splendid colors

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Alison

suthern

Member Seraphic

since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

1 posted 2009-12-28 12:43 PM

This is simply gorgeous, my friend... *S* I'd be lacing up my boots this very minute if there was a hope for a camping experience like this! *S*

latearrival
Member Ascendant

since 2003-03-21

Posts 5499
Florida

2 posted 2009-12-28 01:46 PM

What a nice story to follow the other with.I could not find words for you before, so was happy to see this one. latearrival

Joyce Johnson

Member Rara Avis

since 2001-03-10

Posts 9912
Washington State

3 posted 2009-12-28 03:00 PM

Alison. You have ooutdone yoruself with this one. Very nice. Love, Joyce

The Lady
Member Rara Avis

since 2005-12-26

Posts 7634
The Southwest

4 posted 2009-12-29 12:44 PM

now this is a masterpiece

Balladeer

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-05

Posts 25505
Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA

5 posted 2009-12-29 08:30 AM

Good grief, woman! You caused me to read it three times, not because I didn't understand it but because I enjoyed it so much. I can smell the salmon stewing...and feel the passion and longing.

Beautifully done...

jwesley
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-04-30

Posts 7563
Spring, Texas

6 posted 2009-12-29 08:46 AM

extremely well written my friend; a beautiful piece.

(be darn if I'd let that salmon go to waste though...)

j.

BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

7 posted 2009-12-30 08:17 PM

This fills up my senses and takes me to a warm and wonderful place.

You captured some great visuals and set the mood just so!!

Always so nice reading you, Alison~

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