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martiniat8
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since 2003-06-21
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Prague, Bohemia, Czech Republic

0 posted 2009-12-19 01:14 AM



Can you hear
Can you hear
the whistle of the locomotion
the horn, in a wailing commotion

emotion
commotion
devotion
promotion

tracks tracks
in the winter
in the crisp'air
taking us forward
taking us back

The more we search
the more we read
the more places
we want to be

longer longer
gets the road
travel down
travel round

going further
going farther
going faster
going father

to and through
over and on
the sea
and back

getting there eventually
so many interesting things to see

in all the planning
in all the plotting
using countries as silk quilt tapestry

the destination
is the less we know of
than that which we do of
the road a'ho

another country
another world
another culture
far different from here

with nothing to fear
with nothing to hide
circling the globe
to the other side

let the journey unfurl
in the ring sing circle
the string of...
the big blue pearl

© Copyright 2009 Kenneth Bradley Smith - All Rights Reserved
ninjawild
Junior Member
since 2009-08-11
Posts 33
u.s. army
1 posted 2009-12-19 01:50 AM


very.. odd.. but very creative.. here and there you went on to something.. but i think you took it to someplaces that didnt make sense..

..wisdom comes from the better choices of stupidity..
..curiosity is above all the best teacher..

The Lady
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since 2005-12-26
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The Southwest
2 posted 2009-12-19 10:14 PM




very interesting work in rhythm and content
somewhat reminiscent of Gertrude Stein

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Member Rara Avis
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3 posted 2010-01-02 08:07 PM


I enjoy your use of words and cadence.  I like this one.

A

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