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Open Poetry #45

It Should Have Been Me

Juju
Member Elite

since 2003-12-29

Posts 3429
In your dreams

0 posted 2009-12-17 03:51 PM

It Should Have Been Me

I thought time would begin to lag
and the interim would not cease
while I wasted foolishly

Juju

-Juju

-"So you found a girl
Who thinks really deep thoughts
What's so amazing about really deep thoughts " Silent all these Years, Tori Amos

MorningStar
Member

since 2009-10-26

Posts 290
Pittsburgh, Pa

1 posted 2009-12-17 06:22 PM

Wow. Haunting, familiar and wonderfully done.

Aenea

If I don't say it...who will?

viking_metal
Senior Member

since 2007-02-02

Posts 1337
In a Jeep, Minnesota.

2 posted 2009-12-18 10:27 AM

nice to see you again. this is very concise. I liked it loads.
Paul

Fall in love early, fall in love often.

therightside
Member

since 2009-12-09

Posts 64
USA

3 posted 2009-12-18 02:45 PM

I like the simplicity. To simplify in words emotions to which simplifying the feelings inside that they cause seems impossible, is not an easy task. Well done.

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

4 posted 2009-12-18 05:50 PM

Nice...James

Huan Yi
Member Ascendant

since 2004-10-12

Posts 6688
Waukegan

5 posted 2009-12-18 07:26 PM

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I love your writing Juju

John

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