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Like Father, Like Son.
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Like Father, Like Son. |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA 
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I never knew my father I never knew my son. The man that I despised is now The man that I've become. The wheel of life keeps spinning The cycle's never done. I never knew my father I never knew my son. |
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Mysteria 
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
How sad this is. It is never to late to kindle relationships they say, if you are willing to do that. I was not, so can easily identify with this poem. |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
I am keeping this. A |
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LindsayP Member Elite
since 2007-07-28
Posts 3410Australia, Victoria |
Hello Mike, you tell a very sad tale with very few words and I really feel for you my friend, but I do think you are being too harsh on your self. Keep your chin up Mike for we are all pulling for you. Take care. Lindsay |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Thanks, old friends. It's just a poem, a little creativity being espressed...that's it. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Something that could have been culled from movies, scenarios, tales told. Short. Sharp. Poignant. A man's coming. |
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Klassy Lassy Member Elite
since 2005-06-28
Posts 2187Oregon |
... soft eye, sad sigh, empty nest; years fly and sign themselves out in question marks. Very, very strong lines to wander... Karen  |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
It's impressive, dear Balladeer. It implies a situation that is very often reality. Perfect tune to it ... Love, Margherita |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
This reminds me a bit of Harry Chapin's "Cats in the Cradle"... Both remind us of how easy it is to let time slip away and distance develop. This is short but powerful... great write! *S* |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
Powerful write, Michael. I never knew my father either, though he was around. Ida |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
You pack a punch in very few words Michael ... you are a master my friend.  Loved this.  Best wishes, /Kit |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
wow this hits hard |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
A little poem that sure hits a big nerve. I knew it was just a poem Michael, you are too darn sweet not be a GREAT Father.  Love, Mysteria |
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Namyh Senior Member
since 2009-01-20
Posts 988 |
Balladeer - It's the not knowing that rips at us. Then when we find out, we sometimes wish we didn't. There's a little of that in all of us as you so eloquently and poetically write. Namyh |
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Oklahoma Rose Senior Member
since 2008-02-28
Posts 1586Oklahoma USA |
You are a Pro, my friend. I enjoy reading whatever you write. |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Well done Deer...very well done. your touch is right on... It was almost the end of my father's life before we began to know each other...Death is so deftly silent, isn't it? |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Nice writing...reminded me of that song with the words "Daddy don't you walk so fast, Daddy slow down some cause you're making me run, Daddy don't you walk so fast."...James |
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