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martiniat8 Senior Member
since 2003-06-21
Posts 897Prague, Bohemia, Czech Republic |
There you sit there, on the other side of the glass and I, I... just a caress away a simple move of your finger a bend of your wrist a click to where I am in a symphony no closer to a requiem and money... I have and freedom... freedom to go anywhere but where I wish where I wish to be wanted and no... no place for me there no heart for me there where you are and I I... the sad symphony the lacrimosa of strings choosing choosing where to go but where I wish I must go alone so it seems... to this man in a solitary symphony a lacrimosa of strings one day closer to his requiem |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Lacrimosa indeed. Sad, but your heart speaks its melancholy beautifully. Love, Margherita |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
and I, I... just a caress away a simple move of your finger a bend of your wrist a click to where I am in a symphony no closer to a requiem ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ This is so taking my breath away, what a beautiful, bittersweet piece of poetry. Nice...very! [This message has been edited by BluesSerenade (12-03-2009 11:00 PM).] |
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martiniat8 Senior Member
since 2003-06-21
Posts 897Prague, Bohemia, Czech Republic |
Margherita: Yeah, I write sad well, usually my best writing, I think, usually Blues: I REALLY like the excerpt you pulled out by itself. I think it stands alone beautifully, perhaps along with the top few lines. I may consider that in an editing decision later down the road. You have a great eye, thanks for pointing that out.  |
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latearrival Member Ascendant
since 2003-03-21
Posts 5499Florida |
I am not a blues lover but you did this beautifully. I enjoyed the sadness the way you wrote it. latearrival. |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
love the poem, some despair but quite powerful verses. yann |
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