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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana 
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He'd made his declaration Asked her to be his wife Knowing they'd face some hard times Knowing she was his life But he could see the questions That she could not dismiss Looking into her blue eyes He answered them with this: "Starting at forever And adding fifty years We will be together Through laughter And through tears You are all I want And all I'll ever need We will make it, darling This love will succeed" They loved each other fiercely Started a family She'd bathe the kids each evening He'd bounce them on his knee But then the doctor told them They didn't have much time Fearing that she would leave him He whispered "My love, I'm Starting at forever And adding fifty years We will be together Through laughter And through tears You are all I want And all I'll ever need We will make it, darling This love will succeed" But love cannot stop cancer And on a winter's night Clasping close her lover's hand She lost her valiant fight Home seemed so bleak and empty Without his loving bride Then he whispered a soft prayer A child tucked at each side "Starting at forever And adding fifty years I swear I will weather Even these bitter tears You are all I want And all I'll ever need Help me to be strong, darling So our kids will succeed" |
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Chalmette Guy Senior Member
since 2009-03-11
Posts 1257Louisiana |
"Starting at forever" I love that phrase. Incredibly poetic and romantic suthern. |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Beautiful Ruth ... the sentiments throughout, the carry forward of verse and the lesson that we must carry on, even in the face of loss. Very nicely written.  Best wishes and hugs, /Kit |
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romantico Junior Member
since 2009-12-02
Posts 16NYC |
Absolutely wonderful penmanship!!! |
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Zainab Junior Member
since 2009-11-01
Posts 18Iraq |
Starting at forever And adding fifty years We will be together Through laughter And through tears You are all I want And all I'll ever need wooow totally amazing poem and this part in particular is breathe taking . |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
wow..that is one powerful write!  "too bad ignorance isn't painful" |
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SeraphimBroken Member
since 2009-03-09
Posts 74USA |
This really pulled my heart strings... very powerful pen indeed! |
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LindsayP Member Elite
since 2007-07-28
Posts 3410Australia, Victoria |
Starting at forever And adding fifty years We will be together Through laughter And through tears You are all I want And all I'll ever need We will make it, darling This love will succeed Dear Ruth that was a real delight to read Although sad it was a very poignant well written poem, I think one of your best. Love and a big hug. Lindsay |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
CG: Thank you so much, my friend. *S* I wish I could take credit for that phrase, but I was challenged to write a poem using that phrase. Thank you for liking the result. *S* Kit: Thank you so much! I know you know how hard it is to go on after a loss... big hugs! romantico: Thank you so very much! Zainab: That's the chorus... and believe me, you don't want to hear me sing the song! LOL Thank you so much!! Susan: Thank you... I'm glad you liked! SeraphimBroken: Thank you... I really appreciate that! *S* Lindsay: Thank you so much, dear friend... Your response means a lot to me! *S* |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
This is heartbreaking, yet ever so beautifully written, dear Ruth! One of the saddest events that can happen is when children lose a parent. You have rendered this with delicacy and mastery. Love, Margherita |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
You are all heart, and it shows with every word you write, suthern gal! |
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latearrival Member Ascendant
since 2003-03-21
Posts 5499Florida |
Ruth, A woman after my own heart. You have it down pat. Life has to go on, and some one has to take responibilty. Love this poem and love you. jo |
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nourzihane Member
since 2008-07-10
Posts 254Algeria |
Dear suthern All what you write is wonderful we hope more thank you so much My respect Nourzihane |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ms suthern...the prayer kind of will of a woman is stronger than the metal of any sin..very cool stuff here ms |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
wonderful poem, all we need is love, thanks for the poignant verses. yann |
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Soul snatcher Junior Member
since 2009-11-24
Posts 29 |
Simply superb suthern..... Enjoyed every word..... Beautifully written....thank you Ss |
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WTBAKELAR
since 2008-09-09
Posts 1089Utah, USA |
This is one of your best poems that I have read. What a beautiful, sentimental, write. Well done, Tracey |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
good read |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Margherita: Thank you so very much, sweet lady! *S* Blues: You sure know how to make me smile... thank you! *S* latearrival: Thank you so much, my friend... I appreciate you! *S* nourzihane: Thank you so very much! *S* DS: Thank you, kind sir! *S* yann: Thank you for such a kind response *S* Soul snatcher: Thank you! *S* I'm so glad you enjoyed! *S* Tracey: Thank you so much, my friend... that really means a lot to me! *S* vandana: Thank you! *S* |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
A beautiful and touching write, Ruth. Ida |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
This has to be one of your very best no matter how sad. It reminded me of every single loss I felt and the ache that takes over your very soul until acceptance arrives. By the way, the response you left of Helen's poem could easily be a second choice of mine. I am walking around here calling myself a Phoenix today. Happy Holidays to you and yours.  Love, Mysteria |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
suthern - a most beautiful writing. Passionate and sadness combined in this poem... BC |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
Suthern gal....simply incredible write lady.... |
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therightside Member
since 2009-12-09
Posts 64USA |
this is absolutely beautiful, it really touched me. I am new to this site and to writing poetry, you seem to be very good at it, i would greatly appreciate your input, i posted a poem 'Stuck inside myself". i would love some feedback if you have a moment. thanks! and i look forward to reading more of your work, this is truly beautiful |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Ida: Thank you so very much! *S* PS: Hugs to you! *S* Mysteria: Both of them pretty much tumbled out... which only proves once again I'm a stenographer, taking dictation, not writing. LOL Thank you so very much! Bill: Thank you very much! *S* Toerag: Thank you, my friend... It's so good to see you... SMOOOCH! therightside: I'm so very glad you liked... thank you! *S* |
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