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martiniat8 Senior Member
since 2003-06-21
Posts 897Prague, Bohemia, Czech Republic |
Chasing letters down the pages words spread about used so carelessly wondering reading writers Where was I... How did I... start to write a soul tries to speak reads like a fourth grader trying to describe quantum mechanics better to describe a sunset orange in its simplicity than to force words forced wanting forced yearning forced feeling in an effort an effort to be romantic? so shallow a soul or does it take time time for the heart to find its vocabulary its rhythm its repetition rhythm rhythm beat meets the tepid timid tormented tempest kind so... sloooooow like love.. in the waiting |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
Hello Martiniat I love your poem which set human fragility in love, your poem mogves me cause I feel the same way sometimes...Thanks for the subtle poem. yann |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
I have no clue why this has so little responses because I think it's beautiful, artful...simplistic in a very complicated way... I really fell in love with this poem. "too bad ignorance isn't painful" |
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martiniat8 Senior Member
since 2003-06-21
Posts 897Prague, Bohemia, Czech Republic |
Thanks guys. Susan, I don't know really why any of my poems get so little response. I have a few regular fans, like Yann. My style is just very different from others here, I guess. This one, however, is kind of a criticism of other writers here and other places I post. It asks questions of ourselves as writers and as humans. Sometimes I think our writing is reflective of our love lives, sometimes it seems forced, when it should just flow out of you like a river beautiful and messy. If your own poetry reads crappy, most likely your love life is too. ie forced, 2 dimensional :P Just a theory... Anyway it's a good observation to always self evaluate one's writing. ~Brad |
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HopeS Member Elite
since 2000-12-22
Posts 4596Perth Western Australia |
Hey Brad I like this one ,I have not written too much recently , my mind keeps going to and fro , I am waiting for words to flow Hope |
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martiniat8 Senior Member
since 2003-06-21
Posts 897Prague, Bohemia, Czech Republic |
Hey Hope, good to hear from you. Yeah, I know what you mean, I went through about 10 days like that last week. Had a bad experience with a girl and took me a while to recover after the mental emotional swing. It will come, just can't force it.  |
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