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martiniat8
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Prague, Bohemia, Czech Republic

0 posted 2009-11-18 01:15 PM


Oh, you know me...
thanks for checking in

I...

I
am
the camel in the desert that just keeps going on

always thirsty, hungry, hopeful and strong

oasis?
oh,
they come and go
just a mirage
the wavy massage
for the journey
a ho

from the tip-top
of my camel top
camel-eyed
camel-high
ride

I enjoy the view
of a cloudless desert
blue sky view

to the distant dunes
walking to my
camel tune
the view
is always a beautiful hue

over rick-rocks
through shifting sand-clocks
under the light of
noon

oh,
you know me

where all the world's a stage
the actors the plays
all revolve
and...
rearrange

and I

I, the narrator
an actor with range
delivering his monologue soliloquy

standing in the key-light
spotlight
moonbeam
page

© Copyright 2009 Kenneth Bradley Smith - All Rights Reserved
AncientHippie
Member
since 2009-10-15
Posts 411
Surfing the Cosmic Flow
1 posted 2009-11-19 08:56 AM


Interesting construction here, Kenneth.  I love the syncopation, mimicking the sway of the camel.  I also appreciate the point of view here:  sort of a je ne sais quoi, that speaks of nonchalance, but is, in fact very connected.
Great read.
Peace
Jim

"We are stardust:  we are golden:  and we've got to get ourselves back to the garden."  --Joni Mitchell "Woodstock"

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