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Alison 
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! 
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Sing out of tune while fingers strum on silky skin that softly hums. Crescendos offer us the key to open doors and set love free. Nocturnal curtains drop on cricket bands in June; while under velvet darkness we sing out of tune. The candle drips wax down the stick and music sparks once hidden tricks. Light flickers marks on silent walls as graceful shadows rise and fall. A glorious sunrise brushes warmth on bared hips, then follows trails created by the candle drips. - Alison |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Alison, is this something being worked in the workshop? I like the content and the 8 count lines... I'll snoop around and more of an idea of what is going on....... by the way....HI |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
The candle drips wax down the stick and music sparks once hidden tricks. Light flickers marks on silent walls as graceful shadows rise and fall. A glorious sunrise brushes warmth on bared hips, then follows trails created by the candle drips. Wow... *happy sigh* This is superbly sensual! Great write, m'dear!! |
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secondhanddreampoet Member Ascendant
since 2006-11-07
Posts 6394a 'Universalist' ! |
interesting 'write' ! a particularly fine image: "Light flickers marks on silent walls as graceful shadows rise and fall" applause !! |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
Hi Magnus, Funny you should ask as I was just wandering through the lessons to see when I started working with Balladeer in there. I was shocked to realize he has been teaching and spending huge blocks of time with those of us participating for almost a year and a half. This was the last assignment, titled "Wrap it Up", I believe. Thank you for reading. Alison - suthern, Thank you for reading, understanding and enjoying. Your smiles and comments make my day. xoxoxo Alison |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
Thank you, dear Bruce. It's not my favorite style of poetry, but it is interesting to write. A |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Such lovely intimacy you unravel here, dear Alison. Most beautifully "wrapped up"! Love, Margherita  |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
Thank you, Margherita. I got a note from a sister who told me my poetry is "doggerel". Needless to say, I am feeling a bit quiet lately - with support like that who needs a critic right?  Thank you again. Alison |
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LindsayP Member Elite
since 2007-07-28
Posts 3410Australia, Victoria |
You wrote it well dear Alison, different but most enjoyable. Love Lindsay |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
Alison - Yes, certainly well done and most enjoyable. All credit to the "student". Helen |
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Balladeer
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Doggerel, huh? Get her to join and let us see some of her work...my knife and fork is ready! Hey, Mrs. critic, get up on this stage. You be the songbird and I'll shake the cage. Don't ever let criticism get you down. Those who criticize are fueled by jealousy, more times than not. Those qualified to criticize another's work, never do - unless invited. Just revel in the hundreds of positive responses you have gotten here from other poets and disregard the negativity. You have become an excellent writer and I'll will put your work alongside the best. Tell your sister my karma just ran over her doggerel!  |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Bal has more poetic creds than I could ever hope to have... but I enjoy your work immensely and have watched you grow... and you're one of the poets I look for whenever I come to read. I'm so proud of you and the poems you write. So please give your sister a long and enthusiastic raspberry and tell her it's from me!! |
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Osprey Member
since 2009-04-12
Posts 249 |
Sing out of tune while fingers gently strum Upon that silk-skinned, softened, sensual hum Crescendos offer us the music key To open darkened doors and set love free As evening shadows snuff a cricket June We'll sing a twilight darkness out of tune When candle wax drips slowly down the stick Sparkling music, will play her hidden trick Light flickers marks upon the silent wall As gracefully the shadows rise and fall The glory of warm sun, strokes naked hips And follows fragrant trails of candle drips not trying to be a smartass, just joining in the workshop x |
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Balladeer
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
We'll be happy to see you there, Osprey. The workshop has it's own forum...see you there. |
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