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Open Poetry #45

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A Beautiful Disaster
Member

since 2007-01-13

Posts 409

0 posted 2009-11-11 04:57 AM

You're shallow as a pool of dirt,
In which your semi-force has drowned.
Your words are pointless and absurd;
You spread your helplessness around.
You hide behind your ego brand,
You contradict your each demand.

You're freedom-proof, yet still aware
Of all the grieves of your position.
Wipe out the rust of your despair -
Your brand is someone else's mission!
Your programmed life has gone astray,
Your days are like a failed replay.

Poetal
Member

since 2009-11-09

Posts 74
Texas, United States

1 posted 2009-11-11 06:17 PM

Thanks for the good read and well written poem

AL Inmon

GBride
Senior Member

since 2009-07-02

Posts 538

2 posted 2009-11-13 07:34 PM

this poem is delightful!
i like your poems.
they really make me laugh

1slick_lady
Member Ascendant

since 2000-12-22

Posts 6088
standing on a shadow's lace

3 posted 2009-11-13 07:36 PM

are you reading my mind?
cause you just said what i was thinking

LindsayP
Member Elite

since 2007-07-28

Posts 3410
Australia, Victoria

4 posted 2009-11-15 09:39 PM

Hello ABD I get the impression that you are

not very happy with that person you are writing about but you wrote it well.
Take care.

Lindsay

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